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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England 
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Alone, I chart an ocean's course of woe, A fool to pride upon a gilded ship, The frigid winds of wrath and sorrows blow, And fiercely lash away my stubborn grip. Horizons rage with thunderheads of grief, A coming storm, inevitable, looms, Submerged damnations tear me like a reef, The lust, it promises me endless dooms. Adrift, the sirens sing lamenting tones, "So why the tears upon my sinful bed?" Their flashing fangs still pierce my bloodied bones, In nests of silk, the ecstasy of dread. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive, dear Luke, truly powerful. And beautifully done. Love, Margherita |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY powerful piece! much applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Luke, you will grab hold of the helm and steer your ship safely into harbour. Keep those sirens at bay. They can bring a good man down with their siren song ~ and lascivious ways. Keep forcused on your plans for the future. I truly believe that you have what it takes to manifest them into reality.  Do not get lost along the way.What a fine writer, ye be!   Linda |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Good writing. Thank you for sharing. A |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I always enjoy your writing, Luke. Ida |
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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
Adrift in a stormy sea; a very nice piece of writing. I hope the stormy weather lets up soon. Toccata |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
We all have travelled in that ship, it’s a tough ride that. Strong and lovely write. Be strong… "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Luke...This is the first time i've read any of your poetry, but I promise it won't be the last. Your words have made a fan of me. Gave me the thought of a love lost soul in the 1800's...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very powerful, gripping write! Loved this! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
good stuff here, Luke-us maxi-moose. I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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