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rachaelfuchsberger
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0 posted 2009-08-19 06:04 PM



We were always meant to be you see
Glee just fills my heart for all to see
When your hands touch me I feel again
When we touch my head begins to spin

I would never try to question why
I have never felt the need to cry
You bring me up when I’m feeling blue
True is what I’ll always be to you

Fate has set us on each other’s plate
Great love seems to always wait for fate
Games are played in love's beloved name
Maim my heart, oh lovely fateful game

One day when you suddenly are gone
Wont I’ll be to join you there beyond

Arana Darkwolf

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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2009-08-19 07:18 PM


Yo dear Arana,

This is fine work.  I like your correct use of "wont".

Love Bobby

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2 posted 2009-08-19 07:18 PM


A tender love write.
It sounds like this is a very special person in your life, someone who makes you happy!

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3 posted 2009-08-19 07:49 PM


Dear, sweet Bobby,
Thank you. I've been trying to work more of the older language into my writing lately. That was my first real attempt.

Midnitesun,
The person this sonnet was written for is, indeed very important to me, and makes me extremely happy every day.

Arana Darkwolf

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4 posted 2009-08-19 09:15 PM


hello Rachael, I love the poem and its emotions so sincere.

yann

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5 posted 2009-08-19 09:39 PM


Thank you, yann. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Arana Darkwolf

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