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Yoinn
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0 posted 2009-08-18 11:10 AM


Drizzle

My mood is grey
Heavy as a widow’s smile.
I walk a staggered line
With pockets full pain.
Church bells ring
For someone
Faint and haunting

I sit hard
On a bench for losers
Pigeons don’t even bother
To ask me for a thing.

I lean forward
Put my head in my hands
With a suppressed scream
I rub at love's teeth marks.
When will it stop
Being my enemy

With a sigh I look up
No clouds floating by
No sun to warm me
Just the drizzle of
Another lonely day.


Never do injustice to a man who isn't afraid to die because of it.  - Yoin

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Marchmadness
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1 posted 2009-08-18 01:12 PM


A haunting poem, Yoinn. Written with your usual mastery but sad.
                                   Ida

inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2009-08-18 02:42 PM


this haunts
in a good echoing way

martiniat8
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3 posted 2009-08-18 02:56 PM


great write, kinda reminds me of Dwight Yoakam's song, Inside the pocket of a clown
A Romantic Heart
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4 posted 2009-08-19 01:55 AM


Awe...here is a

well, I hear you and see you....
and hope your day is a sunny one tomorrow!

~ARH

2islander2
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5 posted 2009-08-19 03:05 AM


creepy, Yoinn, but very convincing and beautifully written...Ouah .

yann

Yoinn
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6 posted 2009-08-19 09:47 PM


Yeah I kinda ebb and flow with my writing. Been on the sad, painful swing for the last few days now. thanks for your reply Ida.

Yoin

Yoinn
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7 posted 2009-08-19 09:48 PM


Thank you Inke Glad you liked it.

Yoin

Yoinn
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8 posted 2009-08-19 09:49 PM


I don't think I have heard that one Brad. I will have to check it out. Thanks for the reply.

Yoin

Yoinn
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9 posted 2009-08-19 09:50 PM


Thanks ARH. That little hug from you sure will help.

Yoin

Yoinn
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10 posted 2009-08-19 09:52 PM


thanks Yann. As always I appreciate you words.

Yoin

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11 posted 2009-08-22 02:08 AM


Yep, you have been on a sad poem roll, but you write them very well.  Hope life is not this bleak for you though.

A

Yoinn
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12 posted 2009-08-22 11:05 AM


Allison,
  Lol yeah the roll had been about 30 years now. No I am really not at all depressed. It just seams to be what I want to write about is all. So I just go with it.

thanks Allison.

Yoin

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