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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio

0 posted 2009-08-17 09:07 AM



In the twilight organza
where you conjure me
nightly with the bornagain
tulips and the pipedreams
of sycamores
in the respite of moonlight
released to the marigolds
with your carnival prayers
at the hour of sunset
in the harkening hollows
seeking lifes orchestration
as the flames drain the darkness
with the passing regatta
etching rhythm and movement
to the sea of cortortion.


[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-19-2009 08:38 PM).]

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unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24
Posts 477

1 posted 2009-08-17 05:13 PM


I knew from the title you would stun.
That and the fact that you always do.

In the twilight organza
where you conjure me
nightly near the bornagain

Love the way you spill.
H

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic
2 posted 2009-08-17 05:27 PM


WOW! You write for the masses
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
3 posted 2009-08-17 11:34 PM


rich tapestry of textures and colors.  Love the way you think gal!
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
4 posted 2009-08-17 11:56 PM


Yea, I want to get in your head and see things like you do.

Beautifully outrageous writing, blondielocks~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2009-08-18 07:44 AM


ms inki...
you make see thru seem too too cloudy...enjoyed your blush here

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace
6 posted 2009-08-18 08:39 AM


beautiful
Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 2009-08-18 07:29 PM


Oh, I'm such a sucker for great imagery, and you nailed it.
zaaclindsay
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since 2009-08-12
Posts 111
Ottawa Ontario
8 posted 2009-08-19 11:38 AM


this is quite nice imagery like twilight caught in the moment.  the only thing i would do is to space between each thought ang image.  it gives it more impact and gives a reader a cue to pause and ponder the wonder of each moment you present.

very nicely done.

zaac

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
9 posted 2009-08-19 09:29 PM



exquisite goddess


Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28
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Oklahoma USA
10 posted 2009-08-20 09:37 AM


Absolutel beautiful! I always enjoy reading what you write.
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
11 posted 2009-08-20 09:53 AM


thanks everyone for stopping by and making me smile
a pleasure to see you

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
12 posted 2009-08-20 12:02 PM


Oh, where do I begin?!? ~ Well, for starters, Dear Goddess, I would like to quote all the responders before me and now, please consider me quoting every line of your exquisite poem ~ as my favourite!


Linda

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