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FNG
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0 posted 2009-08-14 12:12 PM


My heart burst with rhythm,
full of passion red,
in sync with love.

A needle pricked,
emptied my heart.

My soul echo loneliness
in the ventricles of my heart.
Searching for traces
that lingers.

None,
resonating,
my echo came back,
bounces off the walls of my heart.

Raw,
fresh,
from the trickling red,
I'm drying off like the desert plane.


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amk377
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1 posted 2009-08-15 04:19 AM


Wow...I can not believe this has not been responded to! This is awesome...your ability to express your emotion so clearly and yet so smoothly is very cool! great piece!

"we have but a moment...only one moment"

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Gaia
2 posted 2009-08-15 05:24 AM


Raw but wonderful anatomy of love's pain.
FNG
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3 posted 2009-08-23 08:29 AM


Thanks amk and midnitesun.... appreciate your kind words.

I just felt immense heartache from my recent breakup,

poetry works wonders in healing

FNG
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4 posted 2009-08-23 08:37 AM


Thanks amk and Midnitesun for your kind words. was going through a heartbreak and felt intensely about it so i had to write it down....rather raw..


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