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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-08-13 07:25 AM



drool sided moon, more of a whiskey melon
and a drunk face man is under the cellophane
but the sky is yet another of his lovers

with highways as their wedding rings
the more the better like the virgins
that you never even knew biblically

and the curves of kanan road are too easy
strapless with narrow shoulders
facing dead reckoning nude side down

like that vulgar lipstick on experience
knowing when to laugh and when to moan
and when to just swallow the sounds

of a tattoo man's ink drinking bleeding sand


___________

daark (highway series, R.I.P. Ditto 08/11/2009)


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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
1 posted 2009-08-13 10:20 AM


You write it well.  I am off to start my day.  Early, I might add!  Sheese, who invented mornings anyway!  I like this poem, D.  So far, I have liked all your poems - so I guess there's no suprise there that I like this one too.

Thank you for sharing.

Alison

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-08-13 11:37 AM


ms ali-san,..morning? heck it is afternoon here...lol  thanks babe
nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2009-08-13 07:39 PM


sometimes it is hard to know exactly what you mean but I loved these lines:
"knowing when to laugh and when to moan
and when to just swallow the sounds"

M


pretty1
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4 posted 2009-08-14 01:56 AM


knowing when to laugh and when to moan
and when to just swallow the sounds

of a tattoo man's ink drinking bleeding sand

I love this part!  The thoughts that the words provoke are incredible!!

Pretty1

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-08-14 07:09 AM



ms MMs..you always know what I mean..grin, thanks ms

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ms pretty1..you make me want to watch you read sometime..thanks babe

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