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crosscountry83
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0 posted 2009-08-13 12:45 PM


I made a few changes to make the meter better..

An eagle starts to soar the time away.
She shows the best example of a flight.
She flies so free until the close of day,
Unites with nature 'fore the end of light.
Lands in the nest by swiping leaves astray.
She nestles up to get rest through the night.
But rises quick, at first light in the morn.'
Soon, just in time to see her young be born.

Can anyone else find anything to change?

Rileigh

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1 posted 2009-08-13 01:11 AM


I just enjoyed it.  It reminds me of the osprey nest I have been watching.  I see your improvement, Rileigh.  Keep up the good work.

Alison

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