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busted angel |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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I was just soaring and wearing my worth when you clipped my wings with your words tail-spinning, I careened toward Earth you laughed as I crashed, then burned stunned, I cried because it hurt . so I wrapped myself in bloodied wings and wondered why you’d say such things I was just an angel trying to sing and I had nothing but love to bring I surveyed my busted wings, crying . then someone whispered, but, angel, you are seraphim you have wings to spare, and you will fly again. . so here I am . ________________________________________ (some things I have to say) . Images inspired by my read of ‘Lucifer’s Flood’ by L.R. Brook. The story really happened. . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It's beautiful, I love your spirit and the delicate flutter. It's always so nice to read you~ |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
No, I don't see you as busted. Maybe injured, but always incredible! That's how I see you, girly with the brown eyes that sparkle. xoxoxo A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
PS - I gotta tell you in it's own little box of blue -- that is one heck of a poem. It's incredible too. A |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Shellie, this is so charming and magical, wandering in your words makes feel good, enjoyed your words and nuances of tone of the poem. have a nice day yan |
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ninjawild Junior Member
since 2009-08-11
Posts 33u.s. army |
i really enjoyed reading this.. i like how youve put maybe something in your life into words that are easy for you to understand how it was for you.. great job.. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I really enjoy your poetry. Shellie. Always look for your posts. Ida |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Shellie, I would avoid the extra white space in this poem. Love Bobby |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Wow!!! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I was just an angel trying to sing" ~ And you still are an angel and your poetry sings.  May those spirit wings of yours keep you forever aloft, my dear ss! Love and FLIGHt, Linda  |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
things seem to be busting out all over the place ... including my new found smile : ) Ct |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I really like this, Shellie. We do have a way of making it, don't we? |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
how often people forget that angels have have a warriors heart. Nice to see you back. Yoin Larry Silverstein bought the Twin Towers 5 mths before 911 bombing. He already owned bld 11. He took out "terrorist" ins on them. He won 500 million. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I love the style you are writing in and the presentation it makes. The spacing gives me an open-air feeling, a very appropriate place for flight. Very smooth... A pleasure to read. misce' |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
Thank you everyone for your warm comments on this poem. My presentation has been called to question by my tutors and all I can say is that there were reasons for the formation and spacing...These words just needed to breathe  misce  Thanks for experiencing it the way I did.________________________ Ct : ) . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted ~ L. Hall |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
you have wings to spare, and you will fly again. I kept changing my mind and copying different lines... but love the spirit of these! *S* Beautiful work!! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Shellie, that is a real delight to read, touching and tender. Well written love to you dear lady. Lindsay |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thank you for your kind words miss suthern _____________ thank you too linds |
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