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Earth Angel
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0 posted 2009-08-10 10:36 PM



Artist: Leo Waygen

Leave Me Not
by Linda L. Dowd

Leave me not, dear Beloved, lest this heart aggrieve.
~ For thy absence wouldst lead to mine utter demise.
By mine side, may ye stand. ~ Let there be no good-byes.
I shall bare all to thee ~ as to thee I shall cleave.

Thy soul speakeths the truth and dares not to deceive.
Dost ye listen to reason? ~ To go is unwise.
Leave me not, dear Beloved, lest this heart aggrieve.
~ For thy absence wouldst lead to mine utter demise.

Unto thee I’ll be open to hold and receive.
There will be no reprisals or tears in mine eyes.
I beseech thee, dear knight, to see past this disguise.
~ For together new heights, we shall surely achieve.
Leave me not, dear Beloved, lest this heart aggrieve.

.

© Copyright 2009 Linda L. Dowd - All Rights Reserved
brneyedgrly
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1 posted 2009-08-10 10:46 PM



such wonderful flow

in such effortless style...

and why would he ever

want to leave you?

love you, dear lady  

shel

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BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2009-08-11 01:11 AM


Love this style on you, EA~


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3 posted 2009-08-11 02:45 AM


Linda,

Amazing, Lovely One.  Isn't it fun?

xoxoxo
A

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4 posted 2009-08-11 04:40 AM


Hello Linda, you have your style that is always amazing, there is some magical effect and is always grace...I read you with a lot of reverence and learn english with pleasure reading you, thanks for the poem.

yann

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5 posted 2009-08-11 10:04 AM


Hi EA-I recognize that this has been done in a familiar format, but for the life of me I cannot remember it. It's absolutely lovely in both it's the rhyme and rhythm. Beautifully crafted and a bit on the Shakespearian style....truly enjoyed this piece of work from your pen....peaceseaker
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6 posted 2009-08-11 10:20 AM


Yo Linda,

I would avoid the archaic language.  It sounds pretentious.

Bobby

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7 posted 2009-08-11 01:27 PM


Brown-eyed Beauty ~

I truly enjoy writing in this style. It's as if I am transported back to the days of damsels and knights. It so impassioned and romantic. I have not mastered the language of old ~ but I'm trying. I'm a work in progress. But I'll keep trying because I love it so!

Love to you, sweet ss,
Linda

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8 posted 2009-08-11 01:32 PM


BluesSerenade ~

Greetings, Bluesy! I'm pleased that you like this "style" on me! There are several pipsters who seem to have it down pat and I greatly admire the skill that they show in writing in this manner.

Big warm hug,

Linda

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9 posted 2009-08-11 01:35 PM


Alison ~

Yes, Lasky Girl! It is fun trying out new forms. However, following the 'recipe' can be somewhat arduous to follow at times, ~ but I find that the effort is worth the while!

Thank you, Sweetie!

Love 'n hugs,
Linda




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10 posted 2009-08-11 01:39 PM


Yann the Man ~

That was exceptionally nice of you to say. It is highly gratifying to know that my poetry does all that for you! It is responses like yours and our kind fellow pipsters that encourage me to keep on writing. It makes me feel as though what I'm writing ~ is worth writing. Thank you! Oh, and btw, I'm sure you know that I am a BIG FAN of your poetry ~ and you!

Love 'n a hug,

Linda

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11 posted 2009-08-11 01:43 PM


peaceseaker ~

Well, bless your sweet soul. Thank was kind of you to say! This is a Rondel and was somewhat challenging to write. I'm pleased that you appreciated my efforts! I'm glad I stuck with it and was able to complete my first Rondel ~ in style! lol

EA

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12 posted 2009-08-11 01:45 PM


Yo Bobby!

Pray tell, didst thou arise from the grumpieth side of thy bed?

Archaic language (which I adore) is very suitable for an archaic form of poetry such as the Rondel.

Linda

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13 posted 2009-08-11 04:19 PM


Thy soul speaketh through this absolutely breathtaking and stunning poem Linda.  Like stepping back eight centuries or more in time
Katriona  

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14 posted 2009-08-11 06:16 PM


2

Greetings, Katriona! I appreciate your appreciation! I swear I must have lived a past life in those times. It is so familiar to me. I suppose that may be why I gravitate to anything pertaining to that by-gone era!



Linda

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Dear Linda,

   After having recently taken on the Etheree,I now know what a challenge writing any form can be!  Your poem is exquisite, and as timely as the artist who paints it!  I think poetry is like art--  Do people avoid painting in the style of Impressionism because it's already been done?  Poetry is the music of the voice, rhythm, tone, language...  It would be a shame not to play with the elements!  I'm so glad to read your poem with its flowing flavor of Old English.  Beautiful work!  (I was trying to figure out the pattern while reading yours and I let out a "whew!"  It looked like a bear to do!

   hugs,

   misc'e  

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16 posted 2009-08-11 07:41 PM


Dear Linda,

   After having recently taken on the Etheree,I now know what a challenge writing any form can be!  Your poem is exquisite, and as timely as the artist who paints it!  I think poetry is like art--  Do people avoid painting in the style of Impressionism because it's already been done?  Poetry is the music of the voice, rhythm, tone, language...  It would be a shame not to play with the elements!  I'm so glad to read your poem with its flowing flavor of Old English.  Beautiful work!  (I was trying to figure out the pattern while reading yours and I let out a "whew!"  It looked like a bear to do!

   hugs,

   misce'  

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17 posted 2009-08-11 07:45 PM


misce ~

Thy glowing mots be music to mine joyful ears!

Yes, it was a "bear" to write! ~ A grizzly bear! I suppose with practice, the writing process should become easier!

That was one kind and eloquent response! Thank you VERY much!


Linda

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18 posted 2009-08-12 02:13 PM


Amazing, your doing an excellent job of learning the old language.  I bet you understand Shakespeare better then me...  Keep it up

Rileigh

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19 posted 2009-08-12 02:28 PM


CC ~

Thank you, Rileigh! I love dear William!

I wish I could speak the King's English of Olde as well as he did! lol


Linda


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20 posted 2009-08-12 02:52 PM


I like it when someone can say things in a way many are unfamiliar with in terms of speech forms and still come through to anyone.

This could almost be heard as vows when these two married.  Nicely done.

zaac

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

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21 posted 2009-09-19 02:50 AM




(smiles) Wow, some druid must have spiked your chalice, as this sounds sooooooooo much like the Olde language of Yore! (does happy renaissance rumba)

(sigh) Longing was indeed a common theme in classic poetry, and you capture that sentiment ever so triumphantly here, dearest Linda! I would try those poetry form experiments more often if I could, but I guess I'm a little too lazy for structure!

(huggies) Another true keeper, yippee!

XOXO,
Noah Eaton

"If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other"

Mother Teresa

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22 posted 2009-09-19 07:14 AM


Language fitting for an Earthly heavenly angel..I like
Earth Angel
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23 posted 2009-09-19 07:43 AM


zaac ~

Thank you very much! I enjoy immersing myself in anything that pertains to the romantic days of olde ~ poetry, books, movies, Rennaissance fairs...

I'm glad you enjoyed reading the fruit of my efforts!


Linda


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24 posted 2009-09-19 07:52 AM


Dear angel friend, NOAH ~

I woke up early this morning with visions of emails coming in one after the other from someone but I could not see who they were from. I couldn't go back to sleep. After a restless hour just lying there in bed thinking about those phantom emails, I felt compelled to go and turn on my computer. Well, there wasn't anything out of the ordinary in my email In Box ~ but there sure was a run of my poems which you had replied to! Aha! So that was what I was picking up on!

THANK YOU!!!!

My smile is so broad that my cherubic cheeks are hurting! lol

Much love and appreciation (and surprise!!!)
Linda

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25 posted 2009-09-19 07:54 AM


Goddess ~

~ and me like that you like!

Merci beaucoups, MicheleRose!

Have a glorious day!



Linda

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26 posted 2009-09-19 06:47 PM


very nice
Earth Angel
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vandana ~

Thank you, Sweetie.


Linda

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28 posted 2009-09-20 05:20 PM


A beautiful expression, dearest Linda.

The crusades were naught but a torrent of fools arrows, innocent blood, and lovers tears.

So much death. And all for a piece of wood and a broken lance.

'Wailing voices on the wind, urging me to turn. Distant tortured screams. Cold blue fires burn'.

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29 posted 2009-09-20 05:23 PM


You did really well with this style. That was very good.
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30 posted 2009-09-21 01:51 PM


Unto thee I’ll be open to hold and receive.
There will be no reprisals or tears in mine eyes.
I beseech thee, dear knight, to see past this disguise.
~ For together new heights, we shall surely achieve.
Leave me not, dear Beloved, lest this heart aggrieve.

It may have been a bear to write... but the result is soft and tender perfection! *S* So very, very beautiful!!! *S*

Earth Angel
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31 posted 2009-09-21 01:57 PM


My dear Luke the Duke ~

"The crusades were naught but a torrent of fools arrows, innocent blood, and lovers tears."

~ Very well stated, my friend!


Linda

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32 posted 2009-09-21 02:01 PM


Iarzana ~

Thank you very much for saying so! Nowadays, this style is not everybody's cup of tea, so to speak. ~ But I do so enjoy writing this way at times. I'm pleased that you appreciated my efforts! Thank you!


EA

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33 posted 2009-09-21 02:04 PM


Suthern One ~

Well bless your sweet souther soul. Yes, it truly was a bit of a bear to write and I am very pleased that you appreciated and enjoyed the fruits of my labour!!!

Ya knows I lovesya!

Linda

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