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Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20
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0 posted 2009-08-08 11:38 PM


dear mother,
I should ask the moon to
take me too
we can praise the rose gardens
and rain down protective beams together
       ****     ****

..circa 2009.Copyright 2009 Spiros Zafiris
..channeled; spirit Harmony

© Copyright 2009 Spiros Zafiris - All Rights Reserved
crosscountry83
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1 posted 2009-08-08 11:51 PM


Short, but carries immense meaning.  Super write.

Rileigh

XGarapanX
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Antarctica
2 posted 2009-08-09 12:08 PM


Like a diamond.

·´~`·­»Brett«­·´~`·

Klassy Lassy
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3 posted 2009-08-10 06:03 AM


...perhaps roses are bathed velvet in moonlight; this feels especially serene and tender.  I love the first line, as if the moon is a special haven of mothers, calm and coolly nurturing.
miscellanea
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4 posted 2009-08-10 08:24 AM


Good things come in small packages, but in this case, great things came in a small package!

a brilliant write, and a pleasure to read! A keeper!

       `miscellanea~

Callista
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5 posted 2009-08-10 09:15 PM


Simple and sweet. It shimmers.
Cal

Spiros Zafiris
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6 posted 2009-08-10 09:21 PM


..thank you dear people..

..your kind words are an inspiration..
spiros

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