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Robert E. Jordan
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0 posted 2009-08-08 05:29 PM


As astonishing as it may seem,
what with cavorting with clients
in the most unabashed sort of way,
Bones is a very private person.  

After finishing off
a particularly long,
difficult
and cruel gig,
he’ll find his way
to an alley.  

He’ll look for
a very dark, and narrow passageway
between two buildings.  

He’ll walk down that passageway,
and find a dark and secluded alcove,
where he will sit quietly,
and sob his eyes out.  

It’s a long walk home.

Bobby

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Marchmadness
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1 posted 2009-08-08 05:39 PM


Very sad.
       Ida

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2009-08-08 05:50 PM


Thanks dear Ida,

Yes, it was sad, very sad.

Love Bobby

XGarapanX
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3 posted 2009-08-08 07:19 PM


Bones has my understanding.

·´~`·­»Brett«­·´~`·

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-08-08 07:21 PM


Bobby, you imparted Bone's anguish, loneliness, and despair so realistically, that I feel like crying ~ for him and for all those who have found themselves in similar situations ~ and far from home...


Linda

Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2009-08-08 08:42 PM


Thanks Brett,

Bones and I both thank you for your understanding.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2009-08-08 08:44 PM


Thanks dear Linda,

For your kind words on the write.

Yes, there are a lot of Bones out there.  Please don't cry, as you know, Bones is going to be all right.

Love Bobby

LindsayP
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7 posted 2009-08-08 09:28 PM



Hi Bobby, can't you find Bones a nice young lady friend, it would solve all his problems, but then again it might not but it is worth a try.

Lindsay

Robert E. Jordan
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8 posted 2009-08-08 09:38 PM


Thanks Lindsay,

For the good advice on Bones.  In reality, Bones is pretty well firmly hooked up with Grizelda.  They are living happily here in the hood, just up the street.

Keep your eye out for a baby Bones or Grizelda coming soon.

They do have babys there in Australia, don't they?

Bobby

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9 posted 2009-08-15 03:02 PM


Dear, sweet Bobby,

I have missed Bones while I've been on my brief, work-imposed sabbatical. I kind of pegged him for the silent, brooding type that only cries in the comfort of seclusion. I adore those types. They're the ones that are strong when the rest of us don't know how to be.

Arana Darkwolf

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10 posted 2009-08-15 03:08 PM


I am always gratified at Bone's ability to cry.  I also love knowing the 'rest of the story' - Bones turned out pretty good and I am proud of him.

Your proud friend,
Alison

Bill Charles
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11 posted 2009-08-15 04:28 PM


Bobby - seems Bones isn't in good thought inside. A smile would help...

BC

Robert E. Jordan
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12 posted 2009-08-15 07:15 PM


Thanks dear Arana,

Yes, that describes Bones very well.  I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

Bones says thanks for the kind words.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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13 posted 2009-08-15 07:18 PM


Thanks dear Alison,

Yes, Bones cries every once in a while.  He doesn't make a habit of it though.  Thanks for being proud of Bones.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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14 posted 2009-08-15 07:20 PM


Thanks Bill,

Bones tries to always be in a good mood, and smile.  It helps in his profession.  However, sometimes he does get down.

Bobby

GBride
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15 posted 2009-08-16 09:43 PM


You inspire me, Robert! I'm starting a series on Cain escaping from the land of the dead.
Your series on Bobby is exciting. You said it, it's the feeling that is created inside you that makes poetry work. Or it was something like that.
What you do with Bobby I am going to do with Cain.
You live in Philly right? I think you said that in one piece you wrote. Well, I live out on the plains of Nebraska. There are not many people here. Both Nebraska and Wyoming lose population every year. We have negative growth in people. We have lots of storms. But I suppose you have storms in Philly too. I'll be in touch!

Robert E. Jordan
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16 posted 2009-08-16 11:04 PM


Thanks GBride,

We don't have many storms here in Philly.  You have to remember, were God's people here in Philly.  I live in the Port Richmond neighborhood of Philly.  It's a poor Polish, Italian, Irish, German, African American Ghetto.  Yeah, we have loads of people here.  We love it here.  It's my home, and I love it.  The neighbors take care of me, and I take care of them.

I've lived out in the country, and I hated it there.  I need a lot of people around me.  It's all what you're born into.  I'm 100% city.

Bobby/Bones

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (08-16-2009 11:54 PM).]

crosscountry83
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17 posted 2009-08-16 11:53 PM


Wow, I have to say I really feel like your poem is real.  Fantastic job all around.

Rileigh

Robert E. Jordan
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18 posted 2009-08-16 11:57 PM


Thanks Rileigh,

I'm glad you found my poem to be real, as it is.

Thanks for the kind words.

Bobby

Mas814
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19 posted 2009-11-14 03:07 AM


What a relatable situation. I love the fact that he cries in a dark alley because it is so private, but at the same time so public. It is almost as if he is hiding from everyone, but to himself believing he could be discovered at any moment. Maybe i'm reading into it too much, but all together... The ideas caught my attention.

Melanie

Robert E. Jordan
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20 posted 2009-11-14 11:23 AM


Thanks dear Melanie,

I'm glad that the poem gained your attention.  Thanks for reading, and commenting.

Love Bobby

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21 posted 2009-11-14 03:05 PM


Bobby, what makes your poetry so appealing to me is that you show us the emotion that goes with a painful reality.  I don't think I could read if you didn't.  And Bones wouldn't have survived if he couldn't find that balance.

I love Bones.

Alison

jennirey
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22 posted 2009-11-14 06:13 PM


I have felt like just sitting down in the alley and crying before too. I can relate to Bones in a way more than you can know.
1slick_lady
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23 posted 2009-11-14 08:26 PM


we all have our sad secrets
Robert E. Jordan
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24 posted 2009-11-14 08:50 PM


Thanks dear Alison,

Bones loves you right back--and of course Bones is good at the survival game.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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25 posted 2009-11-14 08:52 PM


Thanks dear Jennirey,

I'm sure you and Bones would be good friends.  Thanks for commenting on the poem.

LOve Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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26 posted 2009-11-14 08:57 PM


Thanks dear 1slick_lady,

Yes, what you say is very true.

Love Bobby

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27 posted 2009-11-14 10:29 PM


I know hugs can't heal hurts... but I still send hugs to Bones.
Robert E. Jordan
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28 posted 2009-11-15 08:26 AM


Thanks dear Suthern,

Bones needs all the hugs he can get.

Love Bobby

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