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oh_ok
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since 2009-07-20
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0 posted 2009-08-07 08:02 AM


My sanity took a trip and left me here
It would.
We talked about this
Running away is no way to solve problems
Communication is the key
I didn’t even know things were off!
I thought things were good
I was happy…
But my sanity took a trip and left me here
It never calls, it never writes…
I’m starting to get nervous
Is it gone forever?
Is it ever coming back?
Has it found another?
Maybe someone with more stable career plans
I bet their tires are fully pumped too
I’ll get around to it…
So my sanity took a trip and left me here
To document the scenario
In rambling lines…
No real form…
Just thoughts to get out, like it’s something to do
I’m like a cat with a laser point just out of reach
Frantically desperate and not entirely sure why…
And I’m not entirely sure why I’m convinced
That my sanity took a trip and left me here
But it did.
And I think this proves it

[This message has been edited by oh_ok (08-07-2009 09:14 AM).]

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ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2009-08-07 11:06 AM


Eagerly, my eyes followed your thoughts down the page, and I realized that I anticipated the discussion and how the author perceived the flight.  This was good.
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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2 posted 2009-08-07 07:23 PM


Actually, strangely sane.

·´~`·­»Brett«­·´~`·

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2009-08-08 08:33 PM


Well, to my way of thinking, sanity is over-rated!

Actually, I think you are able to write very entertaining poetry will your Sanity is on hiatus!

Skibberry dinky dink,

Linda Lou

martiniat8
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4 posted 2009-08-09 01:09 AM


you're not alone and that's why you landed here. You're among sane friends
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Member Rara Avis
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5 posted 2009-08-09 02:27 AM


Well, I am glad that it dropped you off here before it totally took off.  I kind of am liking having you around.  

A

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24
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6 posted 2009-08-09 03:08 PM



oh_ok,

I really liked your poem.  A lot. It got me thinking... and responding...   I think sanity is a little over-rated sometimes. It's kind of like procrastination---Sometimes, it feels good to put off Sanity for a while!

You're title has stumped me though, as I think Artful!  

  Wishing you a smooth ride with or without your Sanity.  

             misce'





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