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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-08-06 02:46 PM


He reminds himself to see,
To remember what it’s like
To still feel
And for each wound he’ll bear
Are reminders to the world
That he is still there
In debt to the price paid
Worth more than the simple tokens
At his feet laid
For the sacrifices are far greater
Than the rewards sometimes,
But make good theater

He tempers his resolve
With faltering confidence
As his world revolved
Reliving moments in his mind
With a cold, cruel cut
Each and every time
Penance exacted once again
By another form of prayer
For another kind of sin

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Bill Charles
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1 posted 2009-08-06 03:18 PM


Chalmette Guy - you write some very meaningful words and phrose... Nice write...

BC

XGarapanX
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2 posted 2009-08-09 11:11 AM


My sentiments exactly. Meaningful words are seldom wasted words. Awesome.

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3 posted 2009-08-09 04:44 PM


I'll have to return again and read this poem.  It's not my first time to stop and read here - it's just one of those poems that is difficult for me to respond to.  It's thought provoking and unsettles me a bit - makes me think that maybe I am too complacent.

I like it, CG.  There's nothing wrong with shaking me up a bit and making me think.  Nothing at all.

Alison

Chalmette Guy
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4 posted 2009-08-10 08:14 AM


Thaks guys...and good to shake you up Ali.
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