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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-08-05 04:55 PM


You are as a tree swaying in the breeze
Fragile as you brave the storm
For hopes not in vain you send your pleas
And pray not to come to harm
Dangers everywhere, and everything you do
Becomes a testament to see yourself through
You’ll pay to lay down in the fires
For just a chance to shout out your desires

And so as the tree tries to kiss the sun,
You secretly wait for the coming of night
Where all the truths are allowed to run
Standing on your own like a lady in white
In common gardens you plant yourself
Taking care with words of stealth
Believing not in fading to forgotten sawdust
For in someone’s mind you are gorgeous

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2009-08-05 06:32 PM


This is so tender. You never cease to amaze me with the sheer beauty of your heart and mind.
Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
2 posted 2009-08-18 03:17 PM


"You’ll pay to lay down in the fires
For just a chance to shout out your desires"

Beautiful work. You're a very talented writer.

Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
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3 posted 2009-08-18 03:19 PM


Wow...thank you Kaoru. That really means a lot coming from someone of your talent.

This one was buried below the first page too. Thanks.

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
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Scotland/Norway
4 posted 2009-08-18 04:57 PM


So gentle and tender-hearted are your words, a very fine poem.
Katriona

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2009-08-18 08:47 PM


OMgosh...this is so in tune with what
I wrote in Tanka after so much destruction
and onslaught of weatherly conditions...
yet it hits the human import and life
as well ... inside.

Well done, Sir. I've been away awhile...
I hope to visit more often in the next few years.




A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
6 posted 2009-08-19 01:43 AM


For in someone’s mind you are gorgeous....

a place we all like to be...

Beautiful writing~

~ARH

peaceseaker
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7 posted 2009-08-19 06:07 AM


"And so as the tree tries to kiss the sun,
You secretly wait for the coming of night
Where all the truths are allowed to run
Standing on your own like a lady in white
In common gardens you plant yourself"

These words were my favorite out of this interesting piece from your pen....it is most always difficult for me to determine what goes through the mind of a poet..but this was truly enjoyable...peaceseaker

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