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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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~~**~~ {Searching for OZ series, a ramble of heavy heart} ~~**~~ This night of wind and thick air when remembered by the touch of your goodbye I tasted the rain long before it became the fall of storm long before it became the fall of season this one night: I wanted my words to cast upon you soft as the day we let light linger into early morning But the rain was frozen between layers between us I whispered This is what its like -- true silence I’ll describe it here: {in sketching thought} it’s beautiful, it’s damaged the way: water trembles upon petals the way: sounds of water break the way: colors wash away all green again I whispered: true silence; pressed palms please I pray for sleep that I may awake to gentle eyes so winter will not need a reason to stand alone and I will not fear the reason of broken ~~**~~ |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
I like this write very much so. bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. Bernie Slicker |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I pray for sleep that I may awake to gentle eyes My favorite part out of so many parts. Another gem to read. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: So sad, yet so beautiful in its deep melancholy. Exquisite. Love, Margherita |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thoroughly amazing ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Lauren, This is absolutely 100% ... no, 200% ... wonderful. It's awesome. It blows me away. It makes me want to gush and over-compliment. It makes me green (with envy). Do you think I like it? Yep, I really, really do. Alison |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
luv and hugsssss thank you all so much... alison, you make me tyyou ALL DO!!  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Such water marks are left upon this page, and not all of them yours! I feel the green washing to gray, and the wish for blue-sky mornings to waken the heart again and the well deepens... I was never good at good-byes, either. They leave such forget-me-nots. Beautiful poetry, Greeneyes! kl |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
This one must come from somewhere deep In the corner of your soul |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - a very touching write, leaves one with many thoughts... BC |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
I missed your writing more than I had imagined Greeneyes! Such soft beauty in your words. <3 In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
"I tasted the rain long before it came", beautiful, such a gentle and finely written poem, a pour from a lovely heart indeed. Heart2Heart |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I'm lovin' your work, lady. Just lovin' it. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
...always in the zone! good to read you : ) Ct |
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