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Suncleaver
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0 posted 2009-08-03 07:44 PM



Underneath the northern star I was born,
The sign of the wanderer, hungry, forlorn.

Alone I came forth to the season of death,
Midnight’s kiss as I drew my first breath.

I opened my eyes to a sky black as sin,
And the northern star lit up the blackness within.

Filled with the spirits of darkness and ice,
As cold blue witch fires burned in my eyes.

A child of winter, I wandered afar
Bathed in the chilling light of my star.

For the pride of the north was mine to embrace
And the joy of the wild shone bright in my face.

But all seasons turn, we must travel anew
The morning frost turns to scent laden dew.

Awakened from my wandering dreams, I saw
The dawn of the spring of the heart, and the thaw.

© Copyright 2009 Luke Doubtfire - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2009-08-03 07:57 PM


From winter frost a star was born! Your writing was magical even when you were a teenager!

"Awakened from my wandering dreams, I saw
The dawn of the spring of the heart, and the thaw."  

Love 'n hugs,
Linda

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2 posted 2009-08-04 02:24 AM


Luke.

Lovely writing.  It points to what has come to pass - you are among one of my favorite poets here in PiP.

Oh - and I love this line .. how did you know me?  (smiles)  It really does sum me up well.

quote:
A child of winter, I wandered afar
Bathed in the chilling light of my star.



Alison

Margherita
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3 posted 2009-08-04 04:56 AM


quote:
But all seasons turn, we must travel anew
The morning frost turns to scent laden dew.



I feel a touch of sacredness in this beautiful write, dear Luke.

You were deeply aware even as a teenager and highly skilled too!

Love,
Margherita

Chalmette Guy
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4 posted 2009-08-04 08:53 AM


I'm a sucker for teenage poems, which is when I started writing. This is really good for someone so young, and shows that you've always had incredible talent suncleaver.
XGarapanX
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5 posted 2009-08-04 10:49 AM


Amazing. Your grasp of the art shows through even as a teen.  

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

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