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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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you wanted to be the strong that I didn’t have in me to right all the wrongs of things that were done to me you were big in your plans; all the time not knowing that your beast would buckle under my burdens and your knight would die trying to rescue my damsel and the dragon you thought sleeping was slyly salivating because fairy tales are just nightmares spun eloquently you were foolishly optimistic, I loved that about you wanting to snatch me from sucking sand silence thinking that maybe if you saved me from myself it would in turn save parts of me that you might need so your strong hands dug into me, to pull me to safety but left nothing but lavender markings; me still sinking hoping you would be the strong that I didn’t have in me you were persistent in your consistency; tried to help me in ways that were foreign to me; me not understanding how other languages might heal me; lost in translation until there was just nothing more that could be said and you and I, neither one, could live sanely in silence with unspoken truth fingering sign language saying that you couldn’t be the strong that I didn’t have in me . (recycled memories) 06/09 . my mind won't rest and I don't sleep... |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
Beautifully captured. As is most common, words hold no weight to true feelings. So I say to you once again, Beautifully captured. -LostPoet "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." Oscar Wilde |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Take my hand, my friend. I will help you stand strong. Together, you and I can get through anything. |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I like your writing too, Shellie I feel some similarity in our themes at the moment ~Brad |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Shellie, this is quite the analytical masterpiece. You know by now, that we have within us all the power we need, but still we hope that others hold us through the tempests. And it is a human need to find reassurance. To love means also to sustain each other, no doubt. I love to read your wonderfully poetic, insightful and powerful words. Love, Margherita  "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Nice one. A little different style you're trying? Some very cool lines that make one pause and re-read over. Very well done. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"that your beast would buckle under my burdens and your knight would die trying to rescue my damsel and the dragon you thought sleeping was slyly salivating because fairy tales are just nightmares spun eloquently" This is an amazing write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The titles of your poems grab my attention ~ and then when I see that it's a post by pip's Brown-eyed Beauty, I'm sure to pop in for a read! You, m'dear have grown from those days when you needed the strength of another. 'Cause Baby, look at you now! Like me, you're "Standing Strong".  "because fairy tales are just nightmares spun eloquently" ~ I'll have to remember that line! Many Fairy Tales scare the livin' bejeezus out of children ~ and then they are expected to have 'sweet dreams'!  Love you, ss! Linda  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Shellie, This is an interesting take on codependance. Bobby |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
so full of sorrow...i understand that ache to want someone to save us, but it is we who must save ourselves. this is absolutely stunning, shellie. hang in there! maranda |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms brown eyes, you do spill pretty on your gown but you pen it lovely too |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
A riveting piece of gripping verse that caries the reader from start to finish. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
Wow...thanks so much everyone! This actually is a retrospective piece about a very important relationship from a long, long time ago. As we all know...the browneyedgirl is strong and independent now  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
LostPoet thank you for your kind words sue yep, we can  martini thanks so much for reading 'rita 'analytical masterpiece'...my scribbles? love you jer thank you...I don't have styles Balladeer taught me to listen to how the words want to flow...always glad to make you look twice  Miss K I'm blessed by your poetic eyes...thank you |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
sol sista I love you thank youbobby ~chuckling~ thanks...love you maranda thank you, darlin' ds thanks...been awhile D.Young thank you...I've been reading you and thought something might appeal to you in these tightly woven lines...I'm glad you are here at pip! love you all, shel |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Sage, serene, surreal. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You have a wonderful talent, good poetess!! Enjoyed, as always~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
brneyedgrly - I'm not sure where you find the words to write like you do, but I find your work in all emotions. You're a great writer, and I enjoy what you write... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Shellie, you have put a lot of thought into this admirable post, much enjoyed. love Lindsay |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
G thanks, thanks, thanks! bluesy you called me poetess and good! thanks sweetiebc can I just say how much I enjoy your comments? thanks james thanks much Linds thank you...love you shellie . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
the most wonderful things we find when we rumage through our poetic minds ... let me know when you have your next Rummage Sale! : ) Ct "You don't have to go |
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