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UNTAMEDelegance
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0 posted 2009-08-01 01:18 AM


Tonight I had a revelation.
I used to look up to people
who were older than me.

I still do.

I thought about how when I was younger
I wanted to be like my sister.
I wanted to be sixteen
and pretty
and I wanted to feel
like I was in control.

Now I'm sixteen.
I don't always feel pretty
and I almost never
feel in control.

But I've learned to hide
the uncertainty
behind my face.

Then I thought
about my mother.
Now forty-something
(she won't tell).
I always hate that she never shows
hardly any emotion.
Not many adults do.

I used to think that for some reason
life had sapped their feelings;
taken away their ability
to feel any emotions
at all.

That adults just didn't feel
the vibrant emotions
like a five-year-old;
like a sixteen-year-old.

But I realized,
they feel the emotions
the same as me,
at age sixteen, uncertain and unsure.

But they've learned to hide them,
better than I.

I used to look up to people
who were older than me.

I still do.

But now I do more.
Not because they've learned
to mask their feelings
so, so well.

But because I now know that
they HAVE the emotions to hide.

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1 posted 2009-08-01 01:23 AM


Wow. Color me impressed, you managed to captivate MY emotions, and technically, I'm an adult.

My mom seems like a robot sometimes, too, but I know better and she hates that.

I, on the other hand, am a big ball of over expressed emotions..and everyone I know knows it, and I hate that. I don't hide them because I feel like they're a gift and nothing to be ashamed of.

I liked this poem, it evoked something within. Well done!

Oklahoma Rose
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2 posted 2009-08-01 08:34 PM


This is a wonderful write.
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