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When Evening Comes
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When Evening Comes |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
come hither, the night. Rejoice all, and take delight, in the stars playful dance, we might... fly |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful! A pity that in a town you can't see many stars, but even one spark reminds us of the cosmic vastness and brings joy. Love, Margherita |
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tsuvo New Member
since 2009-07-25
Posts 1 |
I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the rhymes and the flow of the lines. I could actually see this poems being longer than it is now. I would read a lot about the atmosphere of the night and how it ties into what you've already written. Given what you've got now, I think you could do an excellent job weaving something like that in. Great work. I recently put up a website of kids poems that I've written and I would appreciate your thoughts. http://kidspoems.net Good work, tsuvo |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sounds inviting, Kenneth. Ida |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
martiniat8 - I see the stars dancing from here many nights. Nice write... BC |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Martiniat8, This sounds like a good idea to me. Bobby |
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Penwing Member
since 2009-07-27
Posts 73Waverly, MN |
Beautiful....Perhaps even more in its simplicity ,Penwing |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
thanks guys, right now Im only able towrite about possibilities... Im stuck in a holding pattern |
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