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Mcmust
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since 2009-07-09
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0 posted 2009-07-24 12:57 PM


Love
Simple as water
In the  sea
Holding its treasure
Deep
Hiding not  its wave

Simple as rains
Dropped  in long dried desert
Listening to birds chirping
Breathe in long lost fragrance
With  fresh smile

Simple as   a lake
In spring time, quiet,
A rock Being  thrown  in
Ripple by ripple,
Refusing to be tranquilized

Simple as vapor
Giving  Warmness
And passionate tears
Selfless  

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ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2009-07-24 01:11 PM


You mirror some deeply held beliefs of mine in this magical little write.  Very potent words.
Margherita
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2 posted 2009-07-24 02:06 PM


quote:
Simple as vapor
Giving  Warmness
And passionate tears
Selfless  



Out of beautiful thoughts this simple love holds precious sparks.

Very lovely.

Margherita

OwlSA
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3 posted 2009-07-26 05:30 PM


McMust, you have truly understood love, as this exquisite cameo shows.  The last word of the poem is the most expressive of all.

A quote I copied by hand as a teenager over 40 years ago in Book 1 (of 3) follows.  I still have all 3 books.

"Such tremendous things are expected of love, but it can expect nothing in return.  Its very nature forbids it to demand anything.  The moment love asks for even a little gratitude, it ceases to be love.  It has no pride at all.  That it ought to receive love in return, goes without saying, but when it does not, it cannot protest.  Sometimes the price is staggering - a whole lifetime can be spent giving, giving of itself, with no trace of anything given in return." - from "No Little Thing" by Elizabeth Ann Cooper.

Although this is not the type of love you are talking about in the poem (or perhaps you are talking about all kinds of love), I am comforted by this quote, when the pain of my daughter hating me for more than 20 years for no valid reason becomes unbearable.  I love her no matter what.

However, a word of caution, before committing to a marriage where the selflessness is one-way, weigh up the price and consider whether you are prepared to pay it.  If the love is selfless from both sides, then you are both truly blessed.

Owl

Mcmust
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4 posted 2009-07-28 02:00 PM


Thank you all for your kind, encouraging  words.
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5 posted 2009-07-29 12:17 PM


Some poetry reads like laundry smells from the line?  Does that make sense?  It has a wonderful clean feel to it that makes me smile.  This is such a poem.

Alison

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