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brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

0 posted 2009-07-23 10:54 PM

I was
rudderless
in
lawlessness

yanked by
moody
undercurrents

to leagues
unfathomable

.

choking on
regurgitated
ocean

I’m now
your
silent
muse

when I
wanted
only

revelry

.

my mind won't rest and I don't sleep...
not even in my dreams ~ s. nicks

[This message has been edited by brneyedgrly (07-23-2009 11:58 PM).]

angellea
Member

since 2009-03-29

Posts 144
NC, USA

1 posted 2009-07-23 11:02 PM

well, i certainly celebrate your talent. :-)

very thought provoking.

maranda

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

2 posted 2009-07-23 11:10 PM

I was
rudderless
in
lawlessness

I so loooove that line...

High impact write...with elegant pow.

Got my remote...takin' Shel off mute so we can have some more.

L,
H

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2009-07-23 11:12 PM

There is that edge to your poetry, and yet you always leave a smooth polish.
Not an easy thing to do....and I so enjoy reading you, girly~

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

4 posted 2009-07-23 11:17 PM

well thank ya girls

thank ya very much

h

you are so darn funny

love ya,

s

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

5 posted 2009-07-23 11:18 PM

bluesy

you make me smile big

thank you

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2009-07-24 06:09 AM

Mutation ... from revelry into a silent muse ... this is soulful ... (that definition just jumped into my mind ...).

You are a very charming muse, dear Shellie, you always captivate deeply.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2009-07-24 07:32 AM

a silent muse, on a windless sea perhaps? well penned ms

Heart2Heart
Senior Member

since 2009-05-15

Posts 738
Scotland/Norway

8 posted 2009-07-24 09:05 AM

Surprising what moody undercurrents can do

Very nice, I love your short cropped free style writes Shellie.
Katriona

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

9 posted 2009-07-24 09:14 AM

You saying you're a little dinghy?

Forget that mute stuff...keep it coming!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2009-07-24 10:04 AM

beautifully written shellie, very enjoyable to understand and read.

yann

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

11 posted 2009-07-24 04:39 PM

'rita love your interpretation dear lady love you

ds a windless sea means steady waters...thanks

kat thank you darlin'

yanno welcome new friend

thanks everyone

love,

shel

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

12 posted 2009-07-24 04:48 PM

dear 'deer...

there ya go again...surprisin' me

well...I am blonde, so maybe a little dinghy (good one btw)

master of meter...

your validation of my free~verse just tickles me

I've learned so much from the challenges, and so much from your advice.

thank you

love ya,

shellie

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

13 posted 2009-07-24 08:10 PM

You are very talented, Brneyedgrly!

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

14 posted 2009-07-25 09:21 AM

thank you beautiful rose

my sweet sue

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

15 posted 2009-07-26 12:34 PM

Honesty and clarity, come to mind when read this piece berney. You say a lot in the short span of words. Nice job

Yoin

Just reworked my old poetry page. Check it out before geocities takes it down. Yoin

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

16 posted 2009-07-27 12:17 PM

thanks yo

it's about my mom

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

17 posted 2009-07-28 01:30 AM

i really like your poetry, fellow night owl girly.

xoxoox
A

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

18 posted 2009-07-29 02:22 PM

thanks so much ali~girl

shel

peaceseaker
Member

since 2009-07-29

Posts 161

19 posted 2009-07-29 06:15 PM

Hi Shelli..I think I could identify with some of these mentioned undercurrents....good freestyle piece here....peaceseaker

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

20 posted 2009-07-30 11:54 AM

thanks so much peaceseaker

and welcome!

shellie

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