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Caroline |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
He walked the low-sunned orchard Through a winter-shadowed maze Trod the leafy, apple mulch Imagined August days Of Caroline and Ridgeway walks And soft-skin, cotton miles Of dancers' legs and lovers' grass And apres-passion smiles He stepped the leafless, tangled aisles That stretched the dormant trees Held an apple-blossom kiss That rode the memory breeze He held a dreamer's, statue stare As a diamond sun lay down Watched the sky entice the dusk In a flaming, turquoise gown He fell so deep in Caroline Yet held no ached despair Softly touched those moments as Her scent engulfed the air But as the shadows merged to one And brilliance fell to grey Then fled those warming memories That held the chill at bay [This message has been edited by Osprey (11-08-2009 05:40 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, this is exquisitely written, dear Osprey! Bravo! It has a classical sound to it and emits a very pleasant tune ... and it shows your sensitivity. Excellent work! Love, Margherita |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Osprey my good friend, what a beautiful poem you have written here. Both the rhyming and the metre are spot on. A real delight to read. beautiful. Take care. Lindsay |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Osprey, This poem has very good end rhymes. Bobby |
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