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Drown Me Hard. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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Trickling down the sides of your face I could smell your gold-dust hair. It smelled the way blossoms look when they float in clean water carried by gentle current. You asked me so often "Are you serious?" I watched you tread water, I could still touch with my head above the waves. I should have held you. _____________________________________ Bad Habits. (series) P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak. [This message has been edited by viking_metal (07-21-2009 10:12 PM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
awwww.....you do it every time you write sweet stuff... *sighs*  |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks Seasoup. Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Paul You are tearing it up, buddy. I feel your writes sharply. L, H |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Another great write. I love a poet that realizes the importance of a good ending. Free verse depends on it. Yoin Just reworked my old poetry page. Check it out before geocities takes it down. Yoin |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Heather... Thank you. I think I've won you as a follower. Careful now, or I'm going to start thinking I don't suck quite so much.  Yoyo... Thank you sir. I'm glad you think I fit the bill of a guy that knows something about anything, because I'm pretty sure I don't. Heh... Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
i wish you knew how good you are |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Psssst ... you gotta pull up your romantic side. It's showing.  And I am staring! Ali-peep |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, that fatal question! But how romantic your reaction. Very very lovely! Love, Margherita |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
wow, this is incredible, my friend. Do you mind if I borrow the phrase gold-dust hair? I LOVE that! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Browneyes... When peoples faces explode, maybe then I'll know. Until then... Alahoon... I wanted you to see.  You like? Thanks for reading.I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Margopargo... Thank you. Marty... Yes... I do mind. Thanks so much for reading. You keep following, and I'll start to think you like my poems. I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Paul drains suck you are blissfully unsucky, you know unsuckified, gleaming nonsuck-ness right. *nods* H |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You betcha! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Heather... Thank you. I'll try and take you word for it. Aliboohoo... I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I really love your images. enjoyed,Sir"Its gonna be alright cause I'm okay with me" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a powerfully perfect ending.  |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
i like your style, viking_metal. looking forward to reading more of your work. maranda |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Temptress... Thank you. That means a lot. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Midnite... Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.Angie... Thanks. I look forward to having someone follow me. P I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Shades of "should-of" and intensity that often comes with a backward look over the shoulder.... terrific impact, and I'm enjoying your talent! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I didn't know Viking men could be so romantic! ~ and here I always thought they were a warring breed! Alas, you are the last one standing!   Linda |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Klassy... Thanks. Lindonius... Thank you. I guess I am Germanic in heritage. I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Paul, I was just looking at your little statement, "I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple really." It made me smile. My granddaughter, who is 17, got a bright red pickup, and she immediately put a puffy purple sticker on the back window that reads: Silly BoyS! Trucks are for GIRLS! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Well I drive a Jeep Wrangler. Technically a light truck. I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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