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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2009-07-21 02:52 PM


Share the Truth With Me

What's meant to be, with You and I,
As time goes by, my heart in hand?
The sun shall rise, with moon in sky.

Each day shall come, while here I stand
To help you make it through the years,
As time goes by, my heart in hand.

With less the shedding of the tears
While crossing over shadows' hold
To help you make it through the years.

Allowing feelings to unfold
For trusting, listening with your heart
While crossing over shadows' hold.

Those paths we take, sometimes apart,
Therein, the lessons to be learned
For trusting, listening with your heart.

Those storms will pass when winds have turned.
Therein, the lessons to be learned.
What's meant to be, with You and I...
What's meant to be, with You and I?

M



"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
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1 posted 2009-07-21 03:06 PM


Well this is a form I'm not familiar with myself, looks very interesting, and I must say that though I do not know the rules, you seem to have got this all tied up very delightfully.  Enjoyed very much
Heart2Heart

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2009-07-21 03:09 PM


it's in the poetry workshop forum...

thanks
M

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2009-07-21 07:28 PM


I remember being in awe when I first read  your work, Maureen.
You haven't lost your touch, you write beautifully~

D.Lester Young
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4 posted 2009-07-21 08:10 PM


Great form and presentation
nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2009-07-21 08:19 PM


Lor, you are too kind, and I miss you~~

Hope the world is treating you well.

M
Thank you, DLY~~

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
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6 posted 2009-07-21 10:17 PM



Dear Maureen, that lovely poem is a

pleasure to read my dear, I think one of your best. Keep up the good work, love.

Lindsay

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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7 posted 2009-07-21 10:28 PM


I sure enjoy reading but I guess I still haven't grown up enough to understand/learn what it's all about...makes pretty words and lines though...(must have had a lack of oxygen to my brain when I was younger).

...I mean, you don't have to know all the in's and out's of a beautiful flower to know it's beautiful, do you??

So, I don't rack my brain over the different forms anymore... if it's pretty, it's pretty, whatever the reason. Only complaint i have about the various forms is...I can't do it!!  Darn it!!

chargrinnnned!

j.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2009-07-22 07:14 AM


Thank you Lindsay. I appreciate you taking the time to respond. I think I have run out of "fantasy" writings and if it wasn't for the challenges, these days might be over.

jw, I hope your grandchild is doing better. I am just following the workshop explanations...but I was listening to Barbra Striesand this afternoon while trying to relax on the porch swing and I felt I needed to "do" something to calm my brain from all those thoughts that are worrisome lately.  I am sure those who drive by my busy corner must think me strange every afternoon between 3 and 5.


M

Oklahoma Rose
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9 posted 2009-07-22 11:30 PM


Maureen, this is a very beautiful write. With a very strong message.
brneyedgrly
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nowhere and everywhere
10 posted 2009-07-22 11:34 PM



m

like I said in pw

beautiful writing



shellie

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
11 posted 2009-07-23 11:32 AM


M, you do a fabulous job at meeting these PW challenges! I love how they are showcasing your talents as a writer!

Great write!!!


Linda

Margherita
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12 posted 2009-07-23 11:40 AM


Your thoughts are very effectfully expressed here, dear Maureen. I think the different forms of poetry are a great exercise and do help to stop the worrying around our problems and bring some clarity.

Very good job!

Oh, I envy you for the possibility to relax on the swing!

Love,
Margherita

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
13 posted 2009-07-23 03:31 PM


nakdthoughts - ok, I'm sharing, whisper, whisper...

BC

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
14 posted 2009-07-23 09:54 PM


Sue, glad you enjoyed it even though I made a line or two mistakes on the Terzanelle.

Thank you,brneyedgrly for revisiting.

Linda, aren't the challenges fun? You are doing a great job, too.

Margherita, thank you and I am making sure that I am making the time for myself this year. And I treated myself to a new birthday swing since my other wicker one finally gave way after 25 years.  

Bill, whispering back to you...


M


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