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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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taking time was my only crime of record using it slowly on the burns of my memory letting it sizzle down slow into lonely until it was well enough to be freedom again there were more miles behind the leather of me then she would ever even realize existed and yet she wiggled her feet around in clouds for me to hurry and make her some happy sounds she drew funny faces on the boxes there and tried to put my boots in places for shoes impatiently tapping her toes and rattling like the shutters did when dancing with wind it seemed there were always more tomorrows too they came by each day uninvited but welcome never knocked just came in with their baggage and scattered it around the empty I had stored when leaving mostly heart where the highway was ______________ daark (highway series) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I really get into your highway series - I think it shows so much of you and your love of taking off and riding. Plus, your poetry is just fun to read. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san..thank you for taking the time to watch it blur by, little one |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
when leaving mostly heart where the highway was...love that, Dark. i must agree w/ alison. i am a fan of your highway series. makes me wish i wasn't such a chicken about riding. :-) maranda |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms maranda, thanks ms..riding is the best cure for chickenwiggles..the wind blows them feathers right off and gives you that warm fuzzy feeling after.. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"impatiently tapping her toes and rattling like the shutters did when dancing with wind" great lines |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
A wonderfully woven piece of artistry, your words so well placed and different! Jan |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
There has never been a time that I read you when I did not wish that I could write like you. This is...as always and perhaps a bit more |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick...thanks babe!! ____________ ms jb, thank you for your gift of comment _____________ Uriah, humble thanks amigo! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
taking time was my only crime of record using it slowly on the burns of my memory letting it sizzle down slow into lonely until it was well enough to be freedom again ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I love how that feels, the memories and the lonely coming full circle. Makes me a little sad, but you always sizzle even when it makes my eyes burn. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
D You know what I think already. Gosh. L, H |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
DS, I don't think i have taken the proper time to tell you how much i enjoy your poetry. Your images are done with your own unique style. I love how you sometimes delay the meaning of the image for a few lines before letting me get it. ( maybe im just slow lol) but it works. I love your art and appreciate your talent. Yoin Just reworked my old poetry page. Check it out before geocities takes it down. Yoin |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezy, thank you babe..enjoyed you rubbing on this one.. _______________ ms UBP, thanks poetess for the read and touch ___________ Yoinn friend, thank you so much for that..I am blessed by your reviews |
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pretty1 Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 22 |
The words touch me at my very soul. Thank you for sharing and know that the feelings you create are special. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
pretty1, thank you for this touch babe |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: How deep is this?! You shower us constantly with fantastic poetic gifts, dear D.! Thank you! Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar..thanks babe..kind of like I keep the gulls from pooping in the pool by not having a pool so close to the ocean.. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
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