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0 posted 2009-07-20 09:38 PM


Summer Suffocation


The air is still; it’s muggy hot
The clouds look bruised as they hang low
Then thunder volleys breaking shots
As windows frame a lightning show

The sky now casts an eerie glow
While clouds are thick and there's no rain
There’s only stifling heat that grows
And batters at the window panes

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Alison

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1 posted 2009-07-20 09:44 PM


Phew
felt the weight of all that humid hot...hoping for a good rowdy storm

L,
Heather

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2 posted 2009-07-20 09:48 PM


well written ... makes one really 'feel the moment'!

applause!!

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3 posted 2009-07-20 09:59 PM


Thank you, Heather and Bruce, for taking the time to read my poetry ~ and then taking the time to leave your thoughts.

I appreciate you both.

Alison

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4 posted 2009-07-20 10:43 PM



Oh! My Dear, you must have been in Idaho lately.  The trouble with this kind of thing is what we call  drystorms and they cause dry lightning and the fires, we have a lot of trouble with them in the summer time, I would rather have a good rain.

Love 'un stuff
  Billie C.

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5 posted 2009-07-20 10:53 PM


Alison, what a fantastic Risotto! Ooops, no that's a rice dish! Just foolin' with ya, girlfriend ~ about the rice part ~ not the fantastic part! lol

Not only is the form excellently carried out, But I enjoyed your vivid descriptions and the subject! I love storms!

Great job, Lasky Girl!

Loveya!

Linda


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6 posted 2009-07-20 11:48 PM


Hi Billie,

I know just what you mean.  Interior Alaska has lots of dry lightning and forest fires.  Guess that is why Idaho and Alaska are home to the smokejumpers that we have.

Thank you for reading.

Alison

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Linda,

I am so hungry.  Thought you were promising me dinner.  Thank you, dear one.

xoxoxo
Alison


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7 posted 2009-07-21 02:26 AM


...beautiful write, Allison.  Those summer storms are awesome to behold!  We did not get our usual thunderstorm on the 4th this year.  This took me back a lot of years to when I watched electrical storms in the purple heat of summer from my grandmother's window as a child.  She lived in the Grand Ronde Valley which is in the Blue Mts. of Oregon. The sheet lightening would set the entire ring of mountains in relief as the earth trembled. There was jagged lightning, too, of course, and I felt infinitesimally as it flicked like a snake's tongue through the sky.  I'd shrink right into the woodwork, but I was mesmerized, just the same. and could not bring myself to take my eyes away from the fury of it all.


Karen

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8 posted 2009-07-21 06:26 AM


Wow, makes me want to invoke the rain for release ... so powerful are your words.

Masterfully polished little gem.

Love and fresh breezes ...
Margherita

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9 posted 2009-07-21 06:29 AM


Especially loved the ..."clouds are bruised"..., and ..."windows frame the lightning'...
Superb imagery here Alison

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10 posted 2009-07-21 11:36 AM


hello Alison, I like the climate here, the clouds and everything, it is so warm and you described it so fairly, enjoyed very much my read.

yann

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11 posted 2009-07-21 12:05 PM


Oh this one's making me open the windows !  Great little ditty, I know some of the states are suffering sorely now with the heat.  Hope it soon passes and you can have a more normal temperature.
Heart2Heart

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12 posted 2009-07-21 12:08 PM


Yikes, it's hot and humid here but not like what you describe in this poem. Hope it's not really like this where you live. If so, you need an air conditioner.

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13 posted 2009-07-21 01:13 PM


It's pretty hot here but not humid. A few years ago I went to Dallas Texas for a couple of days and the humidity was awful.
I'm not used to that kind of humidity.
Rispetto... hmmm I didn't even know what that was but I do now, thanks to your excellent example.

Chalmette Guy
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14 posted 2009-07-21 02:08 PM


I just strip down and run around nekkid.
That keeps the heat, and the neighbors, away.

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15 posted 2009-07-21 02:17 PM


Dear Alison, this is just a beautiful poem my friend, so descriptive and its flow was flawless, very well done, one of your best I think. Hope a storm comes and there will be relief. Take care my friend.

Rick

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16 posted 2009-07-21 05:28 PM


Wow, Alison!  I am wondering if Alaska has such wild storms in a reaction to the power of your poetry!  You certainly make words work for you and always have "le mot juste"!  (You probably sorta guessed how much I enjoyed your poem!  Smiles.)

Owl

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17 posted 2009-07-21 11:18 PM



nice job on your rispetto allison



shel


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18 posted 2009-07-22 01:18 AM


Hi Karen,

I think that Idaho, Washington State, Oregon and Alaska all share intense wild land fires.  Alaska is being hit hard so far this year - but I am sure you will all catch up.

Thank you for reading.

Alison

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Margherita,

Thank you.  We could sure use a bit of it this year.

Alison

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TD,

Thank you for reading and seeing with me.

Alison

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yann,

Thank you so much for watching the sky with me.

xoxoxo
Alison

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H2H,

Thank you.  It's a normal summer for us - luckily we have lots of land and it is not a huge impact on man or animals.

Alison

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Misty Lilacs,

It's hot - and I have an AC to put in my window.  But, I don't want to pay the electric bill .. so I just keep a cross ventilation going.

Thank you for reading.

Alison

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Ida,

We don't get humidity often but seem to have some lately.  I am learing new forms of poetry from Balladeer.  Come visit us in the Poetry Workshop sometime and play along.  It's lots of fun.

xoxoxo
Alison

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CG,

I have my binoculars ready.  

Thank you.
A

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Rick,

Thank you so much.  I am really trying to learn.

Alison

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shel,

Thank you, dahlink.

A

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Diana,

I saved you for last because I knew I would write the most when replying to you.

Interior Alaska is usually hot.  Like many interior regions, it gets cold in the winter and hot in the summer.  Many say this is 'global warming' but, honestly, I think the warm winters and cool summers are more of a sign of global warming in this part of Alaska.  We had a cold winter and now are having a very hot summer.  Our temps have been into the 90's and hover into the 80's a lot right now.

We aren't getting much rain, but we do get dry lightning storms.  Those are what start most of our forest fires.  Over a million acres have burned in Alaska so far this summer and there is no sign of relief yet.  Fortunately, no towns are threatened and usually animals have time to move from the burned areas.  Also the burns provide new growth which is good for moose to feed on.  We have categories of fires here.  Critical, Modified and Limted fires.  Critical are always fought because they threaten towns, homes or privately owned or Native owned land (only about 3 % of Alaska is privately owned).  LImited fires are allowed to burn after a certain date.  That starts at midnight tonight.  

Anyway, I am rambling - but, yes - we get storms like I described in my poem.

Thanks for being interested.

Alison

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