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Yoinn
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0 posted 2009-07-20 09:17 PM



Blue/Brown

Cigar ashes on my keyboard
Your Words in my head.
Possibilities multiply
With each new recipe you cook.

Soul speak with honesty
Hinting, maybe.

My blue ask?

Brown?

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1 posted 2009-07-20 10:04 PM


I don't really understand this one but it made me smile.

A

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2009-07-21 06:31 AM


If the eyes are the windows to the soul...
Very creative little highlight!  

2islander2
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3 posted 2009-07-21 11:41 AM


love the atmosphere but don't get the blue ask (I am french), However the poem flows sweet and deep in my mind.

regards

yann

Yoinn
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4 posted 2009-07-21 07:26 PM


thank you all for your comments on this piece. It is a little vague and perhaps needs a bit of rewrite.

Yoin

Just reworked my old poetry page. Check it out before geocities takes it down. Yoin

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