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angellea
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0 posted 2009-07-17 11:18 AM


white water


raging waters take me over
rocks bruise my soul
rushing rapids steal my strength
i pray for sandy shores
will no one rescue me?

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unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24
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1 posted 2009-07-17 12:53 PM


Sometimes when drowning we grasp at surface leaves...

Was so proud to see you learn to flip that kayak over right on your very own.

Beautiful pen.

Love you,
H

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
2 posted 2009-07-17 01:12 PM


Hi and welcome~

really wonderful poem!

angellea
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3 posted 2009-07-17 02:16 PM


H, thanks for your kind words. what a ride it's been! ;-)

bluesserenade, thanks for stopping by. glad you enjoyed it.

maranda

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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4 posted 2009-07-17 07:37 PM


Hope you find those sandy shores, Angellea.
Welcome.
                                Ida

angellea
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5 posted 2009-07-17 11:04 PM


Indeed I have dear, Ida. Thanks for stopping by.

maranda

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2009-07-18 10:59 AM


I've done some white water rafting on the Ottawa River up here in Canada! If you are experiencing those kind of "raging waters" in your life, I can certainly understand your need for finding a sandy shore!

Seriously speaking, your metaphor was very effective in expressing your situation. Somehow I believe that a little angel like yourself, will be able to reach that sandy shore on your own. I'll go with you to make sure!

Love & a helping 'wing',
Earth Angel


angellea
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since 2009-03-29
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7 posted 2009-07-18 01:00 PM


earth angel, thank you so much for you thoughtful comment.

i did find my sandy shore.

thanks for stopping by. you're a doll!

maranda

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