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jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
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Albuquerque, New Mexico

0 posted 2009-07-16 05:08 PM





The sweet gentle sound of a rhyming wind
whispers down Sipapu Creek.
A whirlwind snow and spitting rain,
spinning trees to glass .
White-faced rocks
pocked with dirt, eyes errantly peeking
toward Beaver Ridge Dam .
Splintered memories
of when the creek did flow.
.
Trickles of water.
A trail for climbing; ruts perfect
for soft, summer feet.
Now frozen in early day cold.
I search for what was lost,
caught in the bramble
My heart, in pieces, strewn.
Odds and ends.
As we jumped into the mossy deep
to cool in Sipapu Creek.
.
Our rock, special, now cracked with cold,
snow covered in pine- sap ice.
We kissed.
As the gentle sighs of a rhyming wind
carried us beyond the creek and into the wild
of our own desire.
Another time and season,
when the creek did flow and the sweet rhyming wind
sighed down a roaring creak,
merging its destiny with ours.
Leaving naught but odds and ends
in the early day cold.
Inhaling that time
when the creek did flow
and life was warm at Sipapu .



© Copyright 2009 Janet K. Brennan - All Rights Reserved
Bloodline
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since 2009-05-23
Posts 236
Oklahoma
1 posted 2009-07-16 10:26 PM


Jan, a sweet time in hearts and memories
that can warm our soul, life we hold in
our core for moments of remembrance, the spirit that keeps us human,

Bloodline

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2009-07-16 11:59 PM


I literally sighed when I came to the following lines ~

"snow covered in pine- sap ice.
We kissed."

Brought some fond memories of my own.

This is a lovely write and I enjoyed it very much. You are a fine poetess!


EA

OldPoet
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since 2009-06-30
Posts 112
The Left Coast
3 posted 2009-07-17 01:03 AM


Like EA, I sighed. But not for remembrance. For envy.

"And every time I've held a rose
It seems I only felt the thorns,
And so it goes" - Billy Joel

Johan
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since 2009-05-13
Posts 88
Lincolnshire, England U.K.
4 posted 2009-07-17 06:14 AM


I recall your photo Jan when you climbing that trail, this poem really makes one understand you are at one with nature.

Johan

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2009-07-17 07:13 AM


a saturday evening post toast
with afternoon scattered all around
like happy soot from a friendly chimney..

enjoyed your splay of sigh here ms

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
6 posted 2009-07-17 01:48 PM


Thanks poets

Yes, A...it is a place I love to go and you have seen that photo.

Thanks all for stopping by to read

Jan

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
7 posted 2009-07-17 08:19 PM


The rhyming wind evokes such a wistful mood and truly moved me.

Beautiful poetry in motion.

A belated, warm welcome to you, jbstillwater~

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219
Austin, Tx
8 posted 2009-07-17 08:46 PM


Your intertwining Uni-Verse is about dancing words flowing on a canvas of love, and spreading their wings going further.
jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
9 posted 2009-07-18 02:19 PM


Thanks guys:

Happy that you liked it!

Jan

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
10 posted 2009-07-18 05:04 PM


quote:
Inhaling that time
when the creek did flow
and life was warm at Sipapu .



Wonderful nostalgic write, dear Jan!

Outstanding imagery.

Love,
Margherita

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
11 posted 2009-07-21 05:23 PM


Thanks Margh for stopping by for a read

Jan

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