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Today Is Painful
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Today Is Painful |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Today is painful I must say The pain in my back’s here to stay I want to go to my small home I want to go rest in my room To sleep away this painful day My boss tells me that I must stay For me to leave there is no way I still have two hours and some Today is painful… All I want is to go and lay In my bed and sleep through the day In my comfy master bedroom There is no time that is too soon Today is painful… Arana Darkwolf |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~hey, rach... this looks like one of those rondeau poems...nice job! ~s don't wait for the storms to end~ |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Thanks. I had to do a second one, because my first one had practically no meter. I'm hoping this one's better. Arana Darkwolf |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Arana, This is nice work. I hope you feel better soon. Love Bobby |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Dear, sweet Bobby, Thank you. I'm sure I will feel better as soon as I can get into a hot bath at home. I've been dealing with this pain for six years now. Thanks to military doctors. Long story short, they only did one ultra sound in the beginning of my last trimester, so I ended up pushing for 4 hours before they did a c-section and it tilted my pelvis so I have an A-symmetrically enlarged nerve in my back between my L5 and S1 vertibrate (the two that connect my pelvis to my spine). Arana Darkwolf |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
rachaelfuchsberger - yikes, a pain in the back is worse than a pain from the boss... BC |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
lol....so very true. Arana Darkwolf |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Rachel, I think if you can't work go home and have some sleep, if your boss is intelligent he can understand that, you haven't to bear pains while working... best wishes yann |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sounds like both pains are pretty much in the same place? Guess a ride on the rigid frame harley down a bumpy road is out? |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Get an inversion table, they work wonders on back problems. Your poem on the other hand, needs no work at all. Nice, Tracey. |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Thank you all for your suggestions and comments. Stranger, a ride on a Harley is NEVER out of the question. As my mother taught me, "If it ain't a Harley, it ain't a bike." Arana Darkwolf |
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