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When all else has been said... ( A Rondeau from the workshop)
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When all else has been said... ( A Rondeau from the workshop) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
When all else has been said may appear what remains is for just you to hear having seen it again and again silence even those masterful pens one would think would have nothing to fear Yet we all have our measure of doubt for regardless what one writes about our success very often depends on that which may appear... to have come from the thinness of air plucked and strung like an instrument fair to produce the most intricate sounds on occasion, at least I have found one thing over all else remains clear on that which may appear... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"...from the thinness of air plucked and strung like an instrument fair" Enjoyed the rhythm, rhyme, and imagery. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Very cleverly written, Dr. Moose! I went in circles trying to figure this out. Not sure if I did, but I really liked your poem a lot. "Yet we all have our measure of doubt for regardless what one writes about our success very often depends on that which may appear..." sometimes appears on the surface slight, but on paper, the depth seems right; an action to word for me best speaks defining confidence the other seeks ~c Just had to play with idea--hope I interpreted it right! Enjoyed it, regardless! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
~ and seemingly from out of mid-air, comes the concept for a poem so fair!  I may try to wrap my mind around a Rondeau and give it a try.  I enjoyed yours!Love & Poet Light, EA  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Midnitesun, Thanks, glad you liked, Doc miscellanea, Thanks, I enjoyed your poetic reply. Actually, something Balladeer mentioned about not writing anything original lately got me started on this. Sometimes it seems the reservoir is pretty well tapped out but the pump just needs a kick. Doc EA, Thanks, I hope you do. Doc [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (07-13-2009 08:13 PM).] |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
ah hah! Now I understand! Thanks for your explanation! Have a good one! misce' |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
So glad you kicked your pump.  Good one! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I didn't see this one in the workshop....lucky for you  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
moose... you made this rondeau shine! ~i chickened out of this challenge~  don't wait for the storms to end~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
miscellanea, Ty, you're welcome. Doc Mysteria, Lol, thanks I think I'm about to get more than my "pump" kicked as I see Balladeer just showed up. Doc Balladeer, You mean I can't pass this off as a Rondeau merely because I substituted different rhymes in the second and third stanzas rather than the one established in the first? Hmmm, who would've thought? You sure do get around. Doc Brneyedgrly, Thanks for your kind words but apparently this isn't a Rondeau at all, but heck, at least it's original, lol. Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
That, too, but I was referring to other things as well. It's decent for any poet other than Dr. Moose. Meet me in the workshop and I'll tell you why |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Back to eraser cleaning for you, Mr Moose.  See you in the Workshop! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~ahem~ moose... i believe balladeer owes you a public apology after his reconsideration of your rondeau...lol |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Right you are, girly. I take back any implication of error and am, at this moment, dipping crow in ketchup. The meter I had a problem with was too obvious for me to see and, with it, the poem is as smooth as silk. Dr. Moose is granted the right to one "payback", which expires in five munutes |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dang! I missed the deadline! Oh well. Alison, Actually I think this one is a wash. He called me on tweaking the rhyme scheme, I drove him to prescription abuse by playing around with the meter. Lol! I will take the apology though, they are extremely rare, and as such will undoubtably be worth an unfathomable amount of money someday. Doc Brneyedgrly, I like the way you think, lol. Technically though, there was no foul, as "Deer" was correct in that I butchered, er " modified " the Rondeau. See ya back in class. Doc |
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