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Two Tin Cans
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Two Tin Cans |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Two Tin Cans a hot afternoon play simply two tin cans yards length of string one tightly tied to the other each of us around a corner a connection sometimes unclear words spoken in muffled echo conversation back and forth then you say, “did you hear me” in a warm sunny magic moment I put the can to my heart "I'm so hard to handle |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Nice. Says much, simply. I like your kind of poetry. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
smooooooooch |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I recall doing that as a child. I was so frustrated because we couldn't get it to work. Aw, we should have put the cans to our hearts instead of our ears!  "then you say, “did you hear me” in a warm sunny magic moment I put the can to my heart" ~ I enjoy your way of thinking and your poetry.  Linda P.S. I learn something new every day! lol |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 AWE! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
1slick_lady - h'mmmmm, I have a tin can, and if you have a tin can... I also have plenty of string... Love your writing... BC |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
awesome!!!! bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This reminds me of my birthday. My friend called me - we have been friends since we were six. Best friends all though high school. We don't talk often now, but when we do - it's like we are still connected by string between two tin cans. Thank you - I am in love with this poem. Alison |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I remember the "good old days of party lines! Oh, yeah! Nothing beats a two tin can line! brilliantly written, as I knew it would be when I saw your name! miscellanea |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
This is lovely Helen ~ Just beautiful, those memories do stay near to one's heart. ARCTIC WIND |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
so very glad you put the tincan to your heart in this beautiful piece, my friend, (somehow I just knew you would),as I had just send mine down the string,painting it red in passing,and the words you heard were really, "I am here" - and the pounding in your chest, our hearts, together, as one. j. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is just delightful, Helen. Reminds of my childhood. Ida |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* So that's the pounding I was hearing! Thank you, always, for being you.  I love ya lady! muahz(And see? I told you all you needed was one line!)  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You rush me back into memories... then leave me smiling with thoughts of those my heart hears now. *S* Awesome write! *S* |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Very good That's why you win Read it again. Would like with your permission to include this in my Word File of poems by others. John . |
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