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brneyedgrly
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0 posted 2009-07-12 06:29 AM




you had something serious
to tell me, i know because
you shut my door behind you
sat in my empty chair and
folded your hands on my desk


then you said the most
disgusting words ever spoken
‘dense’ was the first vulgarity
‘masses’ was the next and worst-
of course, ‘masses’ was plural
which shouted the curse word
‘two’


all on a tiny gland
in your graceful neck


so now, there’s the
waiting for tests
and then there’s the
waiting for results


we don’t know what
we’re dealing with yet


yes, ‘we’ because i
called you sister long ago
and claimed you as
heart and blood
when you guarded my
most precious possession
as if he were your own
and then again the day
you caught my fall
when i received those
last words in a
telephone call


and because i always
tell you that i want
to be just like you
when i grow up,
even though you are
younger than me


so, sorry i couldn’t
hold my tears or
check my worry
because all i could think of
was how tired and sick
you’ve been lately and
how this nightmare would make
obscene sense of things


but, we don’t know what
we’re dealing with yet


so, i cover your hand with mine
and all i can do for you
right this minute
is let you know that
you are not alone


as we begin the waiting…

.
___________________________
~please say a prayer for my katie...


.



don't wait for the storms to end~
learn how to dance in the rain

© Copyright 2009 shellie - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2009-07-12 06:37 AM


Oh, dear Shellie, I am so sorry for what is happening to your friend Katie. For the pain both of you are going through. Your write has such emotional power, that I have goosebumps. Those are indeed the worst news one can ever hear ...

But, as you say, there is still more to know and often, very often regression and healing are a fact.

I join you in prayer for Katie, giving grace for perfect recovery. "Do as if you had already received" says St. Paul, thus the prayer of gratitude ...

Love and hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2009-07-12 07:36 AM


You and Katie are in my thoughts and prayers as  having had a few losses I can understand your pain and worry.


M

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3 posted 2009-07-12 07:59 AM


Hugs...and gentle healing thoughts for your Katie, and you.
Yoinn
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4 posted 2009-07-12 09:50 AM


Strong writing here berney. You capture the helplessness that we feel when a loved one is going through something like this. My heart feels for your both.

Yoin  

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5 posted 2009-07-12 09:58 AM


as poignantly written as anything I've ever read. I wish you all the very best...
Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2009-07-12 10:23 AM


Yo dear Shellie,

That's too bad.  My youngest daughter is fighting breast cancer.  So far she's had both breasts removed.  She's doing better with chemo-therapy.

Being my daughter, she's one tough egg.

Don’t forget to always capitalize your first person singular pronoun “I”.

Love Bobby

brneyedgrly
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7 posted 2009-07-12 10:38 AM



~thank you so much for your prayers and kind wishes...all of you  : )



yo, bobby...

i'm sorry that your daughter is having to fight so hard...you're right, being your daughter she must be one tough egg!  i will include her in my prayers...

as far as your critique...the only words that get capitalized here are God and Christmas...this is my blue page in my poem land!  lol

~love ya


MinSW
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8 posted 2009-07-12 11:54 AM


dearest shellie,

i too will pray for katie in my own way. don't fret yourself. grass is greener on the other side. you both will emerge stronger for all you are going through now..

love,
Min

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2009-07-12 12:13 PM


brneyedgrly - my eyes became somewhat wet while reading this writing. Wish you and your close friend the best...

BC

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10 posted 2009-07-12 12:29 PM


With a friend like you by her side, Katie will be able to face whatever comes her way with a brave heart.

I join you in praying for Katie to be whole and well.

Shellie, you truly are a beautiful person ~ and poetess,

With love,
Linda


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11 posted 2009-07-12 01:30 PM


So very sorry to hear about your friend, Shellie. I know how helpless you must feel right now. My daughter passed away from cancer in 2000 and I've had a scare myself recently. Add my prayers to yours for Katie.
                                        Ida

brneyedgrly
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12 posted 2009-07-12 09:41 PM



~thanks so much, peeps...i knew i could count on you!

she goes for tests on tuesday...

~love~


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13 posted 2009-07-13 03:01 PM


Sweet Shel

I feel you with the tendrils of my soul. Had a rough week myself, and hearing this from you..just know my heart is with you.

Great writing.
If ya wanna chat...
Heather

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14 posted 2009-07-13 03:35 PM


What a tender, passionate rendering.  It is lovely, but hearing that probably doesn't help. I'm sending my thoughts and prayers with you and Katie in mind, hoping that the challenges are fewer than may be anticipated.
I'm sure she likes having you in the corner with her as a great friend.

miscellanea

brneyedgrly
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15 posted 2009-07-13 07:48 PM



~thanks girls for joining hands here...


heathergirl...i will be in touch

thanks so much,

shel

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16 posted 2009-07-19 03:16 PM


Shel,

You stopped my heart.  Your Katie is in my thoughts and prayers.  Your poem is a beautiful tribute to a beautiful friend.

Alison

brneyedgrly
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17 posted 2009-07-19 03:22 PM



~thanks sweet girl...

she had the ultrasound last tuesday and now they feel the need to do a biopsy august 6...she is beside herself...

the waiting is so hard...

thanks for continued prayers...

~shel

Huan Yi
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18 posted 2009-07-19 03:50 PM


.

Shellie


In the end
there is nothing
to fear

Calm Seas
Fair Winds


John


.

brneyedgrly
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19 posted 2009-07-19 04:09 PM


~john...

your words just made me weep...

such comfort in them...

thank you  : )


Sunshine
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20 posted 2009-07-19 04:28 PM


Hello...

This brought to me a jillion thoughts and
more...
and no, I'm not kidding when you had my heart
racing, for substantial reasons....

but thank you for being brave enough to post
something hard enough to think about,

let alone put down on paper.

My prayers are yours.

Well done.


Oklahoma Rose
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21 posted 2009-07-19 05:47 PM


Awwww Shellie, I am so sorry about your friend, Katie. I wish the very best for her. May God Bless You and Her, both!
brneyedgrly
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22 posted 2009-07-19 05:53 PM



~thanks sushine     putting it to paper is how i deal with everything  : )  thanks for your prayers, lady  

~sweet sue          thanks for your prayers, darlin'  

shel

BluesSerenade
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23 posted 2009-07-19 06:55 PM


~Many blessings~

May God watch over you both and keep you as close as can be~

brneyedgrly
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24 posted 2009-07-19 08:52 PM



~thanks beautiful bluesy  

shel


OwlSA
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25 posted 2009-07-20 02:29 PM


Tears and prayers for your friend, Katie, Shellie, and for Bobby's daughter.

Owl

brneyedgrly
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26 posted 2009-07-20 04:07 PM



~thanks for your prayers owl...yes, for kaite, bobby's daughter and for ida and her family as well...

bless us all

shel


ThisDiamond
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27 posted 2009-07-21 06:39 AM


Riveting poem, in elegance of statement for the most trying of times.  Raising prayers for the best outcome. A Keeper.
2islander2
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28 posted 2009-07-21 11:51 AM


shel, this is sad and your poem shares a lot of truths of what we can feel or do...sometimes things improve

hugs

yann

brneyedgrly
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29 posted 2009-07-21 07:10 PM



~thanks yann...

yes, let's hope they improve

shel


brneyedgrly
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30 posted 2009-07-21 07:11 PM



~thanks, diamond

for your prayers...thanks so much

shel


LindsayP
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31 posted 2009-07-21 11:43 PM



so, i cover your hand with mine
and all i can do for you
right this minute
is let you know that
you are not alone

That is such a sad and poignant post
dear Shellie, I will say a prayer for you

and Katie and wish you the very best in every way, Love to you both.

Lindsay

LindsayP
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32 posted 2009-07-21 11:44 PM



so, i cover your hand with mine
and all i can do for you
right this minute
is let you know that
you are not alone

That is such a sad and poignant post
dear Shellie, I will say a prayer for you

and Katie and wish you the very best in every way, Love to you both.

Lindsay

brneyedgrly
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33 posted 2009-07-21 11:46 PM



thanks for your double prayers, linds!

love you and am thankful for you



your browneyedgirl

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