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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
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india

0 posted 2009-07-11 08:55 AM



Heart

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Those two blank lines were my heart beats, graphically.

=© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

Hurt

I want to be the stream of Hooghli this day;
shedding the inhibitions against crying.
At that moment two girls giggle in consort
while sitting in a tram car which passes me;
the laughter rises through the tram car’s windows
and gets drenched by a city which grows into
a rain forest during this season of rain.
A pigeon is bathing its curious neck.
With a snap, the umbrella closes. Rain drops
down thousands of miles upon concretes.  
The smell of rain makes one tired. Tiredness pours.

=© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

clever talks delay friendship!

© Copyright 2009 poddar kushal - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
1 posted 2009-07-11 09:02 AM


Dear Ku,
this speaks volumes!  
can I share my :HUG: with you ?  xxRDBxx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2009-07-11 10:37 AM


Let me stroke your heart into a joyful rhythm again, dear Ku!
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Too much rain must be tiring yes, I believe you. Hooghli is your river there in Kolkata, I learned now on google. You wrote a powerful poem, my young Poet.
Personally I feel energized when it rains.
Miles of concrete ... perfect for an endless dance in the rain. Can you imagine this?
The rain would suddenly be a joyful companion. And if I was tired, dear Roniece would go on dancing with you I am sure.

Sending you a big hug and lots of sunshine.
Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
3 posted 2009-07-11 10:53 AM


When I was a little girl, I would 'chant' "Rain, rain, go away! Come again some other day!" because the rain would interfere with my outdoor play. I have now come to enjoy rainy days but if I'm already in a sad mood, a dismal day adds to my tears. I got totally immersed in your poem ~ as always, Dear Poet.

Giving you a warm, understanding hug and a few solar rays to brighten your day ~ even just a bit...


Linda

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
4 posted 2009-07-11 10:54 AM


Yo Poddarku,

I remember the monsoon season in Mumbai when all the buildings turn green.  

You would miss the monsoons if they didn’t arrive.  

Bobby

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