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Johan
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since 2009-05-13
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Lincolnshire, England U.K.

0 posted 2009-07-09 06:30 AM



Lonely Girl

Forlorn and standing tall
In an empty dockyard basin
Bent and rusted rails
By broken fallen walls
Stood the lonely crane
Below her seized up wheels
And piles of mixed up cables
Lay her rusting tracks
That moved her back and forth
She'd suckled many ships
That docked along the pier
And lifted all the cargo's
Until her day had come
No ships, no men, just rubbish
Drifting down the wharf.


© Copyright 2009 Andrew Shiston - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-07-09 09:34 AM


Wow, this came as a surprise!

Love this very much! A mighty strong girl she was. (pssst ... I do believe she heard you and sheds some rusty tears ...).

Great!

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2009-07-09 02:14 PM


This is magnificent, beautiful and oh, so sad.  At first I thought you meant a bird, and I was confused.  Then I realised it was a metal crane.  I am going to create a Johan folder to go with all my other Pip folders, and this will be the first to go into it.  

I am fascinated at a Johan in the UK!  Are you from The Netherlands, Germany or South Africa orginally - or your name, at least?

Owl

OwlSA
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3 posted 2009-07-09 02:16 PM


When I saved this, I discovered that you are Andrew Shiston.  The mystery deepens.  Are you an admirer of Johann Sebastian Bach?  But then he had 2 n's, so although you may be, I don't suppose that is where the Johan came from.

Owl

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-07-09 02:41 PM


A very sad and undignified state of affairs for a hard-working 'girl' who had spent her life servicing others.

A fantastic write! Your personifation near brought tears to my eyes! ~ Truly!

Sending a hug for the tug and for you,


EA

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
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Albuquerque, New Mexico
5 posted 2009-07-09 04:19 PM


As always, excellent.  A, you are so consistent in your generous style.  A pure pleasure to read

Huggs
Jan

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
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Scotland/Norway
6 posted 2009-07-09 04:52 PM


Oh so sad, a lament for an old derelict crane, many such lying about in the harbours Johan ! You will know.   Strikes me how you see sadness and compassion for things people would normally walk past.  Enjoyed this dear friend.
Katriona

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2009-07-09 06:34 PM


Nice...I've seen many an old cranes taken down by welders torches and other cranes and riggers to ease their falls...and then back to the steel yards to recycle into an automobile or the structure of a building or perhaps another crane...James
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8 posted 2009-07-09 07:36 PM


A fascinating write, a wonderful tale of the once mighty dockside crane. Even in rust, they are magnificent. Thanks for sharing her.
Johan
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Lincolnshire, England U.K.
9 posted 2009-07-10 06:06 AM


Many thanks to you all for your kind comments.

Johan

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