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jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
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Albuquerque, New Mexico

0 posted 2009-07-08 03:13 PM





Most nights I sit
watching a perfect sun
set over the mesa- wide,
dreaming of a place, new
to hang my hat
should I wander from this place
to greener pastures by the sea,
A lake with Loons,
How I love Loons!
Pattering rain on a tin-roof,
or snow frosting a window, north


My reverie ended,
"We're here"
Children, grandchildren and pets.
Passing hugs,
telling jokes,
ice-cold drinks,
firing the grill.
Laughter
through old Bryce Canyon ,
Gentle tugs
"Where is your hat, Gram?"
A hearty reply...
"Right where it belongs, love
Right where it belongs."


© Copyright 2009 Janet K. Brennan - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2009-07-08 03:26 PM


Mmmmm!  I realllllly enjoyed this.  I am a grandmother too, and though I have never seen a loon (we don't get them amongst the thousands of birds that we do get in South Africa) I love them too.  You should look up Magnus' poems about loons.  You would love them too.

Owl

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
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Albuquerque, New Mexico
2 posted 2009-07-08 05:12 PM


Thanks so much, I will do that.  Well, I am a New England girl transplanted here in the desert where, of course, we do not have loons.  But how I remember and love the song of the loon

Jan

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
3 posted 2009-07-08 05:58 PM


jbstillwater - those Loons do have a way with singing what they sing. When at the lake one can hear them saying their words...

BC

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2009-07-08 06:47 PM


Loved the tune ~ Welcome to Pip!


ARCTIC WIND

ThisDiamond
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Michigan, USA
5 posted 2009-07-08 07:47 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Enjoyed your musing, very much!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
6 posted 2009-07-08 08:20 PM


Very nice. Welcome to PIP.
                      Ida

OldPoet
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since 2009-06-30
Posts 112
The Left Coast
7 posted 2009-07-08 11:32 PM


Fellow PIPpers, you are now in the company of two of the finest poets on the planet - JBStillwater, AKA Janet and HeartToHeart - AKA Katriona. Both are dear and revered friends of mine. I've not met either in person nor have I spoken to either by phone and yet dear Katriona knitted a gorgeous Nordic sweater for me and Janet has published my poetry. And that, as Edith Ann was wont to say, is the truth.

"And every time I've held a rose
It seems I only felt the thorns,
And so it goes" - Billy Joel

Johan
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since 2009-05-13
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Lincolnshire, England U.K.
8 posted 2009-07-09 06:33 AM


As always my friend, your poetry is an inspiration.

Johan

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
9 posted 2009-07-09 04:08 PM


Thanks, guys!   Ha!  A and JN, thought I might find you here and thanks so much for the kind words, much appreciated.

So happy that you enjoyed this poem

Jan

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
10 posted 2009-07-11 07:42 AM


A lady should never have only one hat JB!  Enjoyed the momentary conflict here
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
11 posted 2009-07-11 08:01 AM


I live in the land of the loons (some would say loonies ).
Many a night I have been lulled to sleep by the call of a lone loon on the lake.

""Where is your hat, Gram?"
A hearty reply...
"Right where it belongs, love
Right where it belongs."

~ Yeppers! Home is where your heart is.

Giving you a big hug and a warm smile,

EA

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
Posts 738
Scotland/Norway
12 posted 2009-07-11 09:13 AM


Oh loons, such mysterious and magic birds, they make the perfect poet idols.  We have many loons in the woodlands where I live, and I love to sit and listen to their plaintive cries in evening, almost spooky.  Lovely poesy Jan, says a grandmother to another grandmother

Katriona

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
13 posted 2009-07-11 09:36 AM


This is so ... so complete, perfect and I can so much relate to the dreaming of other places, but meanwhile my hat is somewhere up in the skies chased by different winds.

Your conclusion has such a great impact, though it was stirred by a gentle tug.

Rome fits me perfectly, but my two sweet little grandsons are in Belgium ... and my heart is often roaming the Swiss Alps ... you see my hat is in the storm of indecision.

Enjoyed your work deeply.

Love,
Margherita

TinaTrivett
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since 2006-07-15
Posts 569

14 posted 2009-07-11 10:03 AM


I really enjoyed this. I dream sometimes too of other places...and when my granddaughter is snuggled in my lap, I know I too am where I belong.
jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03
Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico
15 posted 2009-07-11 02:01 PM


Thanks fellow poets:

Marg, I feel the same way sooooo often.  And in my younger years my hat also blew over the Swiss Alps, Italy, Germany.  But now I am home in the desert and have my memories.  My hat is now tethered (lol)

Thanks so much all of you for taking the time to read and like this poem

Jan

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