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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-07-02 08:00 AM


meandering wind, perhaps a dancer
seducing leaves that left their mother
before listening to her wise rustle

my eyes are just windows without voyeurs
catching these imaginations in buckets
without bottoms to bend their momentary wings

old oceans walk barefoot on sandy shoes
they glance at breezes like curious children
playing with wet and already used matches

a distant sky has her arms over her head
pretending that her horizon is something new
and she holds it up for the sun to notice

as he looks back over his left evening

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daark

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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
1 posted 2009-07-02 10:24 AM


Daark

You know, sometimes I am spellbound when I read your poetry.  It's a feeling almost like the words weave and twist at every turn and I am mesmerized by them. It's a good feeling to start my day.

Ali-san

DrK&7
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2 posted 2009-07-02 10:28 AM


Very dark, but exceptionally well pieced together.
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2009-07-02 10:30 AM


Ali-san

It might be the oatmeal that does that?  Messmaredeyes I mean?  Thanks little one


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Drk7 thanks for the read.

brneyedgrly
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4 posted 2009-07-02 10:36 AM


dark...

a distant sky has her arms over her head
pretending that her horizon is something new
and she holds it up for the sun to notice

as he looks back over his left evening


~this is almost melancholy...

i got lost in this and i love the places that it took me...

~s


Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-07-02 10:40 AM


Ms browneyes. Thank you for stepping through the beads here.
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6 posted 2009-07-02 10:43 AM


once again, another stunning work...fell in love with this phrase:

"catching these imaginations in buckets
without bottoms to bend their momentary wings"


Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-07-02 10:51 AM


Steavenr

Thanks amigo

Margherita
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8 posted 2009-07-04 11:26 AM


quote:
meandering wind, perhaps a dancer
seducing leaves that left their mother
before listening to her wise rustle



You and the wind spirits of seduction ... you dance with words like no one. But you are also the choreographer, knowing the right position of every single word according to its special meaning ... and there is something infinitely graceful in the result.

Perfect!

Love,
Margherita

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9 posted 2009-07-04 11:53 AM


enjoyed
Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2009-07-05 07:10 AM


ms mar....thanks lady friend


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ms van, thank you

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