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Dark Star
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Lost in your eyes

0 posted 2009-07-01 05:16 PM



     

Quicksand

Dry, alone, untouched.
burried 'neath beige sands.

leaving me behind
had cost me my life, my heart.

The warm winds of summer,
has taken away my remains of light.

My heart was broken
now filling with sand of the earth.

I feel dry,
my body left dormant.

I am enveloped by the desert.
sunken into the quicksand.

~
Lana

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-07-01 07:14 PM


So powerful that I am gasping for air, as if I was in the quicksands too ...
This hurts, but the heart has wonderful healing resources, we experience this again and again.

Well written.

Love,
Margherita

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
2 posted 2009-07-01 09:51 PM


After Reading three poems this being the third,
Broweyedgrl, and the new poet on PIP, and now yours, when love is gone....these poems are very powerful, emotionally intense in expression....

yours, the picture and the poem, just great,
my hats off to you!

~ARH

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2009-07-02 07:56 PM


Emotions and painful words fill every line upon this page of blue. A very sad write Lana


ARCTIC WIND

Dark Star
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Lost in your eyes
4 posted 2009-07-02 07:57 PM


Margherita, thnx
Dark Star
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Lost in your eyes
5 posted 2009-07-02 07:58 PM


a romantic heart, thank you for your kind words

Lana

Dark Star
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Lost in your eyes
6 posted 2009-07-02 07:58 PM


artic wind, thnx

Lana

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