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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-07-01 09:03 AM


With my first breath, I breathed your name
It was you somehow before anyone else
I called, but I called in vain
And I remained lost within myself

Why each of us must choose
I never understood until now
The part we play not to lose,
Yet time lost forever is allowed

Wanting you like the very first breath
Two moths to the same bright flame
Burning ever so slight, cheating death
Both held aloft by whispers of your name

And time moves along quicker still
Everything a blur of that and this
Like things in life always will
Things you search ever for, and miss

Face to face we ageless stand
There you are out of reach
As every word carved in sand
By the waves upon the beach

Flash forward to the end of it all
The skies threaten with unending rain,
Silently the drops begin to fall
As with my last breath, I breathe your name



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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2009-07-01 09:10 AM


Good morning, CG!

"Two moths to the same bright flame
Burning ever so slight, cheating death"

Only a writer with a poetic heart, could have penned that kind of attraction as aptly ~ or as expertly ~ as you have just done.

Some things are worth having your wings singed for.


EA

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2 posted 2009-07-01 10:53 AM


"With my first breath, I breathed your name
It was you somehow before anyone else
I called, but I called in vain
And I remained lost within myself"

*sigh*

beautiful!

Chalmette Guy
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3 posted 2009-07-01 11:00 AM


Thank you EA, may your wings be forever singed, just not burned.

Susie-Q, what can I say? Thanks.
I really am bored at work today, who wants to sneak out for some drinks?

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4 posted 2009-07-01 11:49 AM


Did someone say drinks? *perking up* Would those drinks be of the inebriating variety? LOL I want! I want! *G*

This poem is certainly not wanting, though...It's absolutely beautiful and touches me deeply... *S* Excellent!!!

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2009-07-01 12:53 PM


Chalmette Guy - be bored at work more often, the poem is suberb...

BC

Tara Simms Hall
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since 2001-11-07
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6 posted 2009-07-01 02:23 PM


The first and last stanzas just blow me away!  This poem left me sighing, too.  

Tara

Heart2Heart
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7 posted 2009-07-01 02:48 PM


Hauntingly beautiful poesy.... a delight to read.
Heart2Heart

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