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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast

0 posted 2009-07-01 08:19 AM



you didn't often say much about your heart felt
or those other kinds of feelings you had
when you wore the sun dress kind of smile

and walked along the window side of my ocean
usually around sunset with the sun behind you
so there was not doubt that you were all woman

there was always something special in your eyes
like they could be hands that could be held
if a lover was gentle enough just long enough

and on occasion you would just stand there
letting me take my time to get to know you
wordless it seemed you wore your boxes

with the tops off and so easy to reach into

_____________

daark

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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
1 posted 2009-07-01 08:50 AM


Well, that title sure drew me in! (I've been known to "off" my own wings from time to time! lol

Seriously speaking, your poetry shows a deep respect for ~ and understanding and appreciation of ~ women. And your talent for expressing those, is truly outstanding.


a woman

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (07-01-2009 09:25 AM).]

Margherita
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2 posted 2009-07-01 09:07 AM


quote:
you wore the sun dress kind of smile



Such a lovely thought: may we often wear that kind of smile, the sun would warm the hearts, even if it was behind clouds...


quote:
usually around sunset with the sun behind you
so there was not doubt that you were all woman



You have a keen understanding of women: that's the sweet time indeed, when we can relax and nourish our dreams ...

quote:
there was always something special in your eyes
like they could be hands that could be held
if a lover was gentle enough just long enough


A wonderfully poetic expression! And may there be more lovers "gentle enough just long enough". May they hear!

quote:
wordless it seemed you wore your boxes
with the tops off and so easy to reach into


Wordless transparency is a most precious way to be understood.

Beautiful, most beautiful, dear Poet.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2009-07-01 10:28 AM


Ms EA thank you special angel for the comments and for being a woman


____________

Ms Mar thank you lady and woman for your love eyes here



unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-07-01 01:21 PM


still looking for the station
that's all big daddy
all the time

I could dance to that.

Margherita stole all my highlights.

nicely nicely D

H

brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
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nowhere and everywhere
5 posted 2009-07-01 02:28 PM




     beautiful...

Heart2Heart
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6 posted 2009-07-01 04:22 PM


Loved this one, trying to find a favourite part, but to me this is incredibly good:

"wordless it seemed you wore your boxes

with the tops off and so easy to reach into"

Stunning poesy !

Heart2Heart


Dark Stranger
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West Coast
7 posted 2009-07-02 07:46 AM


ms ubp..thanks for the eyes babe!!


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ms browneyes..thank you for looking over this way


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ms heart..thank you so much for your read and comment

Alison
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8 posted 2009-07-02 10:28 AM


I think I fell in love with this poem.

A

brneyedgrly
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nowhere and everywhere
9 posted 2009-07-02 12:25 PM



~i can't stop coming back to this...

: )

it cannot be picked apart for consideration...it must be experienced as a whole...so no quotes...lol

~s

vandana
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10 posted 2009-07-02 06:33 PM


nice
suthern
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11 posted 2009-10-01 10:33 AM


there was always something special in your eyes
like they could be hands that could be held
if a lover was gentle enough just long enough

I don't think I could ever choose a favorite from your poems... but this is certainly in the upper echelon. *S* Beautiful!!!

Dark Stranger
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Posts 13631
West Coast
12 posted 2009-10-01 12:15 PM


ms ali-san, thank you little one...I enjoy your soft fuzzy footprints here

_______________

ms browneyes, thank you for taking it all in, I appreciate your glances

____________________

ms van, thanks ms

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ms suthern, thank you lady friend for the smile words

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
13 posted 2009-10-02 02:14 AM


*sigh* just beautiful Mr Daark...

Bisous de Paris
RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
14 posted 2009-10-02 07:08 AM


ms r&b, thanks lady freind
Indigo
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since 2001-05-17
Posts 602

15 posted 2009-12-23 02:53 PM


such a perfect time
for slowly unwrapping the
box of your word gifts.

Miss you, D. Hope you find something fun under the Christmas tree!
Indigo

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