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kindredspirit
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0 posted 2009-06-30 10:47 AM


it was over before it began
a twisted perspective whispered
behind closed eyes and doors.

a velvet curtain inhibited their train of thought
in regret of a lack of tracks or structure
bought and sold along with her self respect

innocence forfeited in a final act
two passions hinted the finish line before the starting gun
proclaimed the beginning of tomorrow's race

his self-righteous epiphany boldly announced
a fresh beginning of over-used truths
while rejected words peered behind a trembling facade.

assumptions play hide n' go seek
with romeo's dirty little secret
as juliet embraced the lead role as understudy

the limelight was seduced by the lowest bidder

in our drama that ended
before it began.

[This message has been edited by kindredspirit (06-30-2009 11:29 AM).]

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MinSW
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since 2009-06-14
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Sri Lanka
1 posted 2009-06-30 11:13 AM


highly satirical..
love the lines :

"his self-righteous epiphany boldly announced
a fresh beginning of over-used truths"

love,
Min

kindredspirit
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2 posted 2009-06-30 11:30 AM


Thank you Min.
Chalmette Guy
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Louisiana
3 posted 2009-06-30 11:42 AM


Now this is a mystery.

I enjoyed this much.

kindredspirit
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4 posted 2009-06-30 02:34 PM


Chalmette Guy, Every mystery has a solution. Do you have any leads for this particular case?
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Gaia
5 posted 2009-07-03 05:48 AM


A well crafted intriguing read, greatly enjoyed.
I especially liked this:
"a velvet curtain inhibited their train of thought
in regret of a lack of tracks or structure"


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