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Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

0 posted 2009-06-29 08:56 AM

I saw your face in the sunset
Filling me with awe at the beauty
So elemental, carefree and wild
Such the fantasy in my reality

I saw you rise up from the waves
A jewel washed from the sea
Unattainable, a fairy tale
And I, lost in your story

I saw you in black with eyes so sad
Wondered at what it could be
To make it all seem possible
To be the reality in your fantasy

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2009-06-29 09:14 AM

This portrait is really beautiful.
Jerry, you always view your subject with poetic eyes, then paint with gentle tenderness and passion.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (06-29-2009 10:46 AM).]

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2009-06-29 09:46 AM

nice
i do so love your poetry

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2009-06-29 10:06 AM

"Wondered at what it could be
To make it all seem possible
To be the reality in your fantasy"

exactly

really enjoyed this one

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2009-06-29 11:26 AM

cg...this vision is one of the best places to view her from...each and every whoever, this place where she is almost touchable, but just on the otherside of the glass..kewl moves!!

Heart2Heart
Senior Member

since 2009-05-15

Posts 738
Scotland/Norway

5 posted 2009-06-29 12:05 PM

Exquisite poesy Chalmette, your style of writing appeals very much to me.
Heart2Heart

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2009-06-29 12:42 PM

quote:
I saw you rise up from the waves
A jewel washed from the sea

So very captivating.

Love,
Margherita

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

7 posted 2009-06-29 12:48 PM

~hey, jerry...

this...is really nice...

you arranged the poem very well and i love the mirroring of the first and last lines

I saw you rise up from the waves
A jewel washed from the sea
Unattainable, a fairy tale
And I, lost in your story

~and this is wonderful...

Tara Simms Hall
Member

since 2001-11-07

Posts 87
South Carolina

8 posted 2009-06-29 05:06 PM

"To be the reality in your fantasy"---I vividly recall this feeling, this longing.

This clinches it...you are now one to watch. I may stalk your poetry all over these boards. :-)

Tara

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2009-06-29 05:47 PM

this reminds me of summer storms at the beach, and what one finds after the sea/s have settled....there/s a mystery in this too....

~~**~~
I never let one moment define me,
I define myself by all moments and how they teach and touch me......02

adagio
Member

since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

10 posted 2009-06-29 06:22 PM

... Or maybe by the banks of the river
always was one of my favorite places
another great work
adagio

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

11 posted 2009-06-29 06:26 PM

This is one of the most wonderful verses I have read in awhile. Very much enjoyed your view.

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

12 posted 2009-06-30 12:42 PM

~jerry...

i read this again and...

it's just beautiful!

love,
s

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

13 posted 2009-06-30 08:21 AM

Thank you all!

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