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Tara Simms Hall
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since 2001-11-07
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0 posted 2009-06-28 09:39 PM


Searching for inspiration, I ended up in the Poetry Challenge forum and saw an old challenge for a poem on falling out of love.  Here's mine:

From Beginning to End

It starts with a smile
A look…coy and cautious
A sigh…like a prayer
A longing…to touch
Yearning…to feel
Falling…so fast into
Love.

Love’s end--
Falling…away from each other
Yearning…for what is lost
A longing…unmet
A sigh…never heard
A look…unnoticed
It ends with a tear

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LindsayP
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1 posted 2009-06-28 10:42 PM



Learn by your mistakes Tara and I hope you have better luck next time. Good luck.

Lindsay

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2 posted 2009-06-29 01:09 AM


I really enjoy the challenges.  It's great that you are rambling through them  -  I like your poem.  It's interesting and I might have to try my hand at it.

Alison

Oklahoma Rose
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3 posted 2009-06-29 06:07 AM


Oh my! I have been there, and felt this pain. And, cried those tears.
rascalx
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Florence, SC, USA
4 posted 2009-06-29 07:06 AM


I love the symmetry of this! Especially how well you encapsulated the rise and fall of love. The romantic in me both laughs happily and sighs sadly when reading this. Well done! I may have to try this - intriguing
Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
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5 posted 2009-06-29 10:15 AM


Very clever construction here.
And I enjoyed the all-too-true sadness of it.

Nice.

MinSW
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since 2009-06-14
Posts 53
Sri Lanka
6 posted 2009-06-29 11:04 AM


so so so true in its simplicity...

love,
MIn

Tara Simms Hall
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since 2001-11-07
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South Carolina
7 posted 2009-07-03 09:41 AM


Thanks, everyone, for reading.

Tara

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