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MinSW
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since 2009-06-14
Posts 53
Sri Lanka

0 posted 2009-06-28 11:21 AM



The helpful bird has flown away,
The tree of love has died;
The kindness bird has lived its day
Never to return is the tide.

The joyous sun is wearied out,
The trusted moon is gone;
The fun filled stars not seen about,
A cloud floats alone.

No happy laughs, no yells, no calls,
No hearts- soft and warm;
Just a roof with four blind walls,
A house- no longer a home.

© Copyright 2009 Minoli SW - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2009-06-28 12:53 PM


The sadness, emptiness, the loneliness, loss, and despair were almost palpable. A painfully ~ yet beautifully ~ expressed piece of writing.

May the kindness bird of love, the stars, and the sun return to brighten your days ~ and nights. May laughter reign again within those four walls.

Giving you a warm, compassionate hug,

Earth Angel

brneyedgrly
Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
2 posted 2009-06-28 06:54 PM




~dearest minoli...

i really felt the loneliness in this writing, especially this stanza:


No happy laughs, no yells, no calls,
No hearts- soft and warm;
Just a roof with four blind walls,
A house- no longer a home.
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~beautiful job     : )


LindsayP
Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
3 posted 2009-06-28 11:51 PM



A touching poem dear Min, sad but well written. Always remember that things are never as bad as they seem, and one day you

will look back and wonder why you were so sad. Look forward, not back, have a big smile on your face and you will feel so much better. Good luck.

Lindsay

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA
4 posted 2009-06-29 06:51 AM


Awwww, this is so sad.
MinSW
Member
since 2009-06-14
Posts 53
Sri Lanka
5 posted 2009-06-29 10:54 AM


dear all, thank you so much for your kind words...this poem was wriiten when my brother got married and moved out...i miss him a lot..

love,
Min


Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
6 posted 2009-06-29 02:03 PM


This is so sad, Minoli.
sending positive energy your way.
                               Ida

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