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A Hard Rain (a duet with adagio)
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A Hard Rain (a duet with adagio) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A storm blew through that afternoon it shook me to my roots. I shuddered at the windowsill and thought about what was. I tried to summon all my strength-- A Herculean effort, stalled. The storm blew through that afternoon; the trees appeared to dance. I looked to see if others saw the same thing that I had. Puddles in the street proclaimed reflection of the sun. A spectrumed promise of what was, in faith that all is not undone. A storm blew through that afternoon, and I am left, more than I was. * * * Thank you Ralph, for making the trees dance. You always did have a lovely perspective of things.  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you both for sharing your dance with us. A |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This sits well on my mind and heart today. Thanking both of you  for sharing the gentleness and love that is so abundant within your souls. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"A storm blew through that afternoon, and I am left, more than I was." I find that in every day that lives on, I feel that way. Beautifully done~~ M |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~~always a treat to find your words~~~niiiice duet~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a 'duet' most fine! [I believe that witnessing any of Nature's phenomena leaves us more than what we were ... we are all partners with Gaia in the dance] sustained applause for this 'penning' ! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I really liked it ~ Well done  ARCTIC WIND |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
Great imagery in this poem, I especially liked: The storm blew through that afternoon; the trees appeared to dance. I looked to see if others saw the same thing that I had. Fine poesy indeed. Heart2Heart |
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HAZARD Junior Member
since 2009-06-24
Posts 40ENGLAND |
I shuddered at the windowsill and thought about what was. This couplet pulls me in - i begin to imagine spirit and world locked in mortal battle. On a human plane the wind cleaves its own paths through our lives - while we must sit tight and hold fast! Not sure if Adagio's only line was the dancing trees? But two pens have made a poem! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A most beautiful fusion of emotions. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A lovely melding of two poetic souls and pens. Love and hugs to you both, EA  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~dear serenity... i am so glad that you were left with more than you were...taking life lessons from this experience with you and carrying on... you have great spirit  |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Absolutely beautiful. Arana Darkwolf |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Hey! I ve heard that before somewhere. I like it. P.S. I'M Back Garrett came by just a few minutes ago and brought me my computer back. But he ran out of here so fast your head would swim. I'll be out there a little more now! adagio |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
AWESOME!!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
cool write...with a knock-out ending... "Puddles in the street proclaimed reflection of the sun" ...neat line |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A spectrumed promise of what was, in faith that all is not undone. Thank you both for this... I know you know why. *S* Beautiful collaboration! *S* |
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