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A Cocky Villanelle (for Balladeer)
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A Cocky Villanelle (for Balladeer) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Mama’s rooster tracked me down Lurching on his frozen toes Flapping wings as he spun ‘round Late at night in my nightgown When I’d wake and have to go Mama’s rooster tracked me down Beady eyes would stare and frown Hunching down, his head held low Flapping wings as he spun ‘round On the throne he’d peck my crown Little legs kicked to and fro Mama’s rooster tracked me down He’d fly straight up off the ground Darting, making my fears grow Flapping wings as he spun ‘round His life ended with no sound Dad took him as my tears flowed Mama’s rooster tracked me down Flapping wings as he spun ‘round - Alison [This message has been edited by Alison (06-27-2009 02:15 AM).] |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
HeeHee....this is a cute one |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now that is the first villanelle that I have ever read with a humorous bent to it! They are usually serious ~ and writing one is serious business!  I find them very difficult to write. I'm more of a 'free range' henner. I mean, "penner"! lolThis ought to put a smile on our big buck! Love 'n a hug ~ for you and Balladeer!  Linda Lou |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting 'write' ! applause !! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Leave it to you to write about a little pecker, Alison!  ...but you do it well  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, When we lived in the country, our rooster used to always attack my youngest son. He was pleased when I chopped its head off. Love Bobby |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, yep, roosters can be quite cocky! But you really got me with this one, Alison, writing about a villanous rooster in the villanelle format. BRAVO! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
hehe.. love this Ali-girl, love it!! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You did a great job with this perfect Villanelle, dear Alison! I wish we could have "re-educated" our roosters, instead of making them end upon our tables ... You know I also had such an aggressive rooster, I remember those risky times very well. Love, Margherita  |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
LOL! This is so cute. Alison, this is a great villanelle. I truly love the way you write. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Alison, (Oh girl, if you only knew of my rooster experience living here on the farm!) This is too cute! My mother had one rooster who did a terrific cockle-doodle- ??? but when he hit the doo part he went about four flats too short of his intended pitch. How tone deaf can one animal be? Enjoyed this a bunch. have a great day! |
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