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mrs & the tinman |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I imagine you wish you hadn't got any on you when we exchanged a smear or two there passing too closely by each other not to but then stopping long enough to acknowledge and realize the fit would be perfect it is always those look back laughter places when I watch your eyes read the brail of me like your fingers would if they could but your toy man is always too close so you just show me all of your wanting to and you realize my morality shirt is still lost in some tinman widows laundry basket still far enough away from between us that you only need to worry about your own skin and if it is combustable when ignited or if it would just be a little uncomfortable and loose fitting when all our sins were done and you only wore it to keep your heart inside lest you left it somewhere with a stranger and then went home with that empty again praying just to be stolen by your own dreams _______________ daark (forbidden) |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Dark Stranger, I like this poem. Say hello to the widow Tinman for me. Bobby |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bj, thanks amigo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such interesting perspectives, dear D.! Every line is a highlight in itself really. You pack incredible psychological reflections into your work.... pardon, masterwork. The perception of "sin" seems recurrent, but I think it surfaces because the "forbidden" seems to be so much more attractive ... Eve tells us! The reference to "your morality shirt" is a fantastic example of your poetic genius. I am sure many of those who claim to be morally impeccable have no idea what they are talking about. Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks little friend.. |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Hey Dark really enjoyed this one as I have many of yours. "so you just show me all of your wanting to" I liked this line Yoin |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thanks Yoinn...I appreciate your reads |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
quote: This is so lovely that it almost reads lonely. A |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sounded to me to be a pretty good pickup line for a laundromat  I enjoy all you post, but this one I set the stage. Hope you didn't mind. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks babe ________________ ms myst..I don't mind at all..as many times as I have been taken to the cleaners, I guess I do need a line or two there also.. |
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