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Yoinn
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since 2007-08-16
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0 posted 2009-06-21 08:09 PM



hidden thoughts

oh what is birthed
when eye contact
lingers on the fringe
of intimacy

what delicious
hidden thoughts
in the corner of
your smile

how fate rolls
The weighted dice
For lonely people bound
to secrecy.

How friends and relatives
Whisper the news
But from you accept
the denial.

Yoin

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2009-06-22 08:55 AM


Came back for a second read.  Like the style of this, it flows down the page.

Such secrets seem to bring about an inner glow that is unmistakable.  Inspiring works.

Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2009-06-22 09:05 AM


Ah, I am a sucker for the power of the eye contact.
Well said. (or written, as the case may be)

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3 posted 2009-06-22 12:51 PM


Yoin,

I lke this.

A

unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-06-22 01:27 PM


Pretty cool Yoinn.

H

Yoinn
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5 posted 2009-06-23 12:29 PM


Thanks to each and everyone of you for your replies. Hey I even managed to sneek a little rhyme scheme into this one lol. I have just been overwhelmed by the generous people at this poetry site. I was layed off a few days ago and thought that I would spend time with my poetry. I am so glad i chose to come back here and post. Look at all the friends I am making!

Yoin

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