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viking_metal
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0 posted 2009-06-15 11:23 PM


Your skin
must feel wondrous
falling in drops,
warm rain in may.

You smile,
forcing me to raise curtains,
open windows
let in the light.

You sigh,
and make me feel
so very gentle,
and much less giant.

How I want
to trace your outline
with my charcoal hands.

_______________________________________
I Do Everything Out Of Order, Ellen. (series)

-P

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

[This message has been edited by viking_metal (06-17-2009 06:14 AM).]

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SEA
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1 posted 2009-06-15 11:26 PM


how do you do that?!

you are such a romantic! and I so enjoy every single poem...

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2009-06-15 11:26 PM


Yo Paul,

Gentle is good.  Keep up the good work.

I like this poem a lot.

Bobby

viking_metal
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3 posted 2009-06-15 11:36 PM


My dear SEA... Thanks. I guess I'm hopeless. I don't give poetry to girls anymore.  

Robbus mah main man... Gentle is very good. Thanks for reading, man. I'm glad you like it. You don't say that often, so it means a lot.

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

brneyedgrly
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nowhere and everywhere
4 posted 2009-06-16 06:47 PM





~SIGH~....

viking_metal
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5 posted 2009-06-16 07:59 PM


I'm not entirely sure what to do with that.


Haha

Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth,
They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak.

brneyedgrly
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6 posted 2009-06-16 08:05 PM


~sorry...that was not a bad ~sigh~
maybe i should have said that i am speechless

viking_metal
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7 posted 2009-06-16 08:11 PM


Speechless, huh?

I s'pose no news is good news

Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth,
They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak.

brneyedgrly
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8 posted 2009-06-16 08:20 PM


~k...speechless in a good way!!  i loved your poem, cutie  : )
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
9 posted 2009-06-16 08:22 PM


Thank you, mademoiselle.

(check your email)

Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth,
They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak.

brneyedgrly
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10 posted 2009-06-16 08:24 PM


~already did...check yours
Bill Charles
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11 posted 2009-06-16 09:49 PM


viking_metal - this is written with much tenderness, well done...

BC

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12 posted 2009-06-17 01:00 AM


Oh gosh, Gentle Giant~

This just blushes the prettiest shade of
sigh.

(give hubs some tips, wouldya)

Ahh,
Heather

viking_metal
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13 posted 2009-06-17 06:04 AM


BC... Thank you very much, sir.

Unbound... That's the most poetic response I may have gotten yet. Thank you very much, ma'am, I just am what I am.

Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth,
They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak.

Alison
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14 posted 2009-06-22 01:19 AM


Beautiful, Paul.

A

viking_metal
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15 posted 2009-06-22 01:59 PM


Thank you allaboo.


-P

Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth,
They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak.

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