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freeze us both in time@ Junior Member
since 2009-06-14
Posts 16 |
She lies her way to heaven Kills off that rotten scent You adopting caring creature who is forced to now resent Eyes that hold the darkness like the blackest vacant sky Nothing now remains just a thought of you and I He grips her hand so tightly don’t leave this pretty place Nothing in this world will fix her broken face A fragile little mind hurts just like the fall Nothing now remains; there was nothing there at all note- In your mind The centre is where the void is Once compelled you waste your last breath attempting to claim it |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Welcome to PiP. I have to think about this poem and come back to it. It's interesting. Alison |
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freeze us both in time@ Junior Member
since 2009-06-14
Posts 16 |
Thank you for the welcome Alison the poetry above is essentially random thoughts...I feel what I write seems to some (like yourself) like a code waiting to be cracked/something complex and of a deeper meaning when really it is just simple thoughts... it is nothing significant to me personally …let it hold a different meaning to each individual person depending on how it is interpreted...definitely come back to it and it can be based on whatever you wish it to be Let your mind decode it and bring you the answers Same goes for all readers =] peaceNlove x |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
amazing cant wait to read more |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Randomness can make for some excellent, thought provoking writes. Welcome to Passions! Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I am intrigued by every single line in your poem. As you say it is indeed up to the reader to give meaning and I do find it, after paying attention. Yes, from the emptiness everything is born ... Welcome again "freeze us both in time"! Even in your user name there is the desire to preserve life, or the awareness of it ... Stirring ... even in its melancholy. Love, Margherita |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Maggy said it all "intrigued by every line", you are no slouch yourself my erstwhile complimenter. [This message has been edited by Sonofgloin (06-16-2009 05:24 AM).] |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Read it again, thats good, real good. It goes to aa place where I could never be. [This message has been edited by Sonofgloin (06-16-2009 05:23 AM).] |
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